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climber-man
03-31-2008, 02:40 AM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/03-31-2008/90870_sample1.jpg


http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/31-Mar-2008/90870-sample2.jpg


http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/31-Mar-2008/90870-sample3.jpg



GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Untitled
Year Created: 2008
Medium: Oil
Surface: Canvas
Dimension: 16
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
Seascape at Laguna Beach

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Does it keep you interested, are any parts too distracting, does the mood seem too dark or overwhelming, any other obvious suggestions?

MRSBB
03-31-2008, 10:38 AM
I like the water breaking on the middle rock and the detail of that rock. The rocks on shore IMO would have even more detail than the far one. Overall it is a really nice painting with a beautiful view..........Lenore

diquattrom
03-31-2008, 02:35 PM
Nice handling of the waves. yes it kept my attention.

Corby
03-31-2008, 03:59 PM
It is very saturated color wise, some like that some don't. It is a beautiful painting. I would say the thing that could be corrected to good benefit are the flowers in the foreground. They do not stand up and proclaim their presence. They are sort of squashed down below the foreground edge there. They should to some degree protrude up, and with the saturation of color in the rest of the painting they should sparkle. paint them white that has just a touch of yellow ochre in it to make it warm and creamy, then sparkle a blossom here and there according to a natural looking pattern using that beautiful cadmium sunlight you have touched the foreground rocks with. A picture of natural beauty such as this must by all means not deviate from the realities of subject. Here again the flowers seem to fail for me because (I know something of flowers) I do not recognize them. They do not seem to be what one would find oceanside. This dulls the convincing aspect of the painting. The flowers are a small matter in such a beautiful work...yet it can be said that a painting, or anything for that matter is only as good as its weakest part! Thank you Oliver for sharing this!

climber-man
03-31-2008, 07:08 PM
Lenore, thanks
Michelle, I appreciate your kindness
Corby, thank you and I will try to give the flowers a bit more of a role although I'm afraid of pulling too much attention away from the far rock. In the picture these are blooms on ice plant but I tried to get away with just some blockish forms. Looks like I couldn't fool the trained eye!

kathrynlovespets
03-31-2008, 10:05 PM
I'd like to see some more variation of color...
add some green to the water, red wash to some the grass and rock, etc...

Clive Lutley
04-01-2008, 08:45 AM
This is very good. What caught my eye is the almost ruler straight main breaker. I've taken the liberty of digitally changing it so you can compare and see if you like it better. The rocks are very well done. Perhaps more viridian in the background would give more of a sense of depth to the sea. More shadow into the bottom front of the main breaker and a “lost & found” line might had more realism. Last but not least the foreground swell, which I’ve marked with a circle, is very nicely done but perhaps could be worked a little more to accentuate the dynamic. Hope this helps.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/01-Apr-2008/40135-Sea-MOD.jpg.jpeg

climber-man
04-02-2008, 01:45 AM
Clive, not a bad touch up. I agree that darkening up the background sea with some viridian would make all of us happier(color for kathryn) and more contrast to the foam thx