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KensBrush
01-07-2008, 10:57 PM
Hi - Haven't put anything in WC for a while - been working on some graphite portraits. I would appreciate your feedback on this effort. I put 2 photos of double hibiscus flowers together to make up this composition. Here are the source photos:

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/07-Jan-2008/122440-P1010042.JPG and

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/07-Jan-2008/122440-P1010045.JPG

and the resulting effort is the following - 9x12 on Strathmore 140lb - color of the flower is actually a bit deeper than in the photo - especially where the darks are in the center of each flower - anyway.....

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/07-Jan-2008/122440-P1010056.JPG

Yorky
01-08-2008, 03:48 AM
Hi ken, I found it difficult to "see" in its distorted form so I put it through my mat and frame script. It looks much better. I would perhaps put a an overall pale pink wash over the blooms to smooth out some of the sharp edges.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/08-Jan-2008/1046-HHKenHYbDSE.jpg

Doug

painterbear
01-08-2008, 05:38 AM
Ken,
I think this is lovely. I really like the way you combined the two photos to show the flowers head-on and sideways.

Two suggestions, the blue that is at the top of the larger flower and the bottom of the sideways one is so strong it draws my eye to it away from both flowers. I think a wash of the red over it to turn it purplish like in the lower left corner would be nice there.

Also, if you strengthen the darker tones in the center of the larger flower, it would become your COI and the smaller flower would be the secondary one. You have a nice, strong light coming in from the left top quadrant, so darkening the tones opposite that would be in keeping.

Very nice work.

Sylvia

KensBrush
01-08-2008, 03:52 PM
Doug and Sylvia, Thanks for the feedback. I will try your suggestions.

Doug what software are you using to put on the mat/frame? that was cool.

Yorky
01-08-2008, 04:11 PM
I use Paintshop Pro 9 which has a scripting facility which lets you record a sequence of commands and save them as a single command.

The frame script simply adds a 9 pixel grey border then a 70x70x70x80 white border then a pre designed frame then resizes the whole thing and saves it via the JPEG optimiser ready for uploading to wetcanvas.

Doug

olliewood0702
01-08-2008, 04:30 PM
Loose and lovely your hibiscus!! I like the framed version. You still could use a few more darks in the center of the fully opened bloom though.:thumbsup:

Peggy SCx
01-08-2008, 06:27 PM
I like the movement you've achieved in the composition, especially since you combined images. I like the long curve that flows from the top flower's pistil & stamens, down through the petals of the main flower, and onward to the leaves at the lower left. Lovely.

JudiPatooti
01-08-2008, 09:08 PM
This is really pretty. You can see how the white mat that Doug added really brings out the hi-lites in your flowers. Now all you have to do is put those darks in the flowers that several others have recommended and you're going to have a winner here! Good job!!

Judi