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qeenbee
11-23-2007, 12:03 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/11-23-2007/120613_100_1321.JPG

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/11-23-2007/120613_100_1318.JPG

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/11-23-2007/120613_100_1319.JPG


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Happiness is
Year Created: 2007
Medium: Oil
Surface: Canvas
Dimension: 16x20
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
oil on silk canvas. Almost done I still need to add a few more highlights and shadows.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
The girl doesn't seem to pop as much as I would like her to, I don't want to darken the background anymore I don't think, Any suggestions on how I can get this effect. She seems to fade a little because of the colors of the pony. Also the right front leg, our right, seems a bit off. Any suggestions for improvement would be greatly appreciated

D.W. Flint
11-23-2007, 01:52 PM
Judging from the cast shadow of the saddle horn, it apprears the light is coming from the left. If this is the case you could darken the shadow side of your subject alot including the girl,clothing, saddle etc. Yes,that left front leg of the horse could probably be moved a smidgeon to the center.
Anyway, just my observations. Good job overall and the makings of a great painting.

qeenbee
11-23-2007, 05:20 PM
:cat: I agree about the shadowing, she did seem to need a little more contrast. I also think I may have gotten that leg a little more narrow than necessary. I will try that and see if it helps. Thanks so much for your input a fresh eye always helps

kathrynlovespets
11-23-2007, 07:29 PM
o wow great touch ups!
if you want her to pop more, perhaps you could darken her shirt?? don't know..

ejtupi
11-23-2007, 10:05 PM
Too Much Green in the background. Tone it down, gray it down, blue it down, put in some ochre or sienna or umber or something. Vary the mix, give it some texture. Make the green stop competing with this girl! (Actually, yellow ochre tints in the background might make that blue shirt look awesome as a contrast.... just thinking out loud here....) And I agree, put some life into her shirt with a higher chroma. (Sorry to be so emphatic here, but I'm liking this picture very much and would prefer to see the horse rider be as pronounced as the horse.)

The little girl is adorable, and her expression is one that says she's proud and happy. Wonderful interpretation of your reference photo without a slavelike devotion to details that don't matter. Get rid of all that green, I beg of you. Great job!!!

Dana Design
11-24-2007, 12:28 PM
The balance of color is off here. The horse is much too dark in contrast to the girl and the saddle.

Placing more darks on the shaded areas of the saddle and bumping up some of the lights and darks on the girl will help a lot.

qeenbee
11-24-2007, 02:36 PM
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/24-Nov-2007/120613-100_1322.JPG

I think I have the shadows darker now, thanks to all for your help. I couldn't have done it without your input.:clap: :music: :thumbsup:

Dana Design
11-24-2007, 03:07 PM
Ah! So much better! there's the little girl and now she's the subject of this painting. Well done.

ejtupi
11-24-2007, 03:10 PM
Frame it!:clap:

qeenbee
11-24-2007, 03:39 PM
Thanks again, without your help i couldn't have done half as well with this picture. The person I am doing it for will be very pleased.