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La_
10-19-2007, 04:37 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/10-19-2007/84648_untitled_(waiting).jpg

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/10-19-2007/84648_untitled_(waiting)_dtl.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: untitled
Year Created: 200?
Medium: Oil
Surface: Board
Dimension: 16x20
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
yet another rework

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
anything

La_
10-19-2007, 04:41 PM
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/19-Oct-2007/84648-untitled_waiting_m_dtl.jpg
medium crop detail

toraman
10-19-2007, 07:32 PM
I will be honest. I couldnt believe that this is your work La. Its too bad to be yours. The face is distorted and whats that blue region next to her?

I am used to your excellent paintings and this is not one of them.

Dhuot
10-19-2007, 10:15 PM
I do find the overall composition very good, with it,s many details of walls/interiors (?) and reminds me of those early Bathus painting.
The "blue region" is awkward though.
I think you might be "affraid" to work with strong contrasts that would bring your work somewhere else.

Slurps
10-19-2007, 10:25 PM
The green object really jars against the composition. As does the left hand.

La_
10-20-2007, 03:30 AM
yeah yea, back to the drawing board with it, thanks much for your honesty! this one pretty much sucks
much as there's freedom in re-working old pieces, sometimes .. well, ya just get deeper into crap.

La_
10-21-2007, 03:20 PM
okay, so, last gasp at this one ... i totally agree that the previous 'she' sucked big time, but i did like parts of the background and figured it worth working some more.

halloween is getting close, creep mode snuck in for this rework ... hands are Huge, i know, proportions are wonky, but I think it's better work, if not better for saleable.

New title is "What's your Poison"

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/21-Oct-2007/84648-Whats_your_Poison.jpg



and a detail ...

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/21-Oct-2007/84648-whats_your_poison_dtl.jpg

toraman
10-21-2007, 06:33 PM
Significantly better :) I dont want to drink what ever is in that bottle, for sure.