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mooz49
10-12-2007, 05:03 AM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/10-12-2007/27632_Border_Collie.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Border Collie
Year Created: 2007
Medium: Acrylic
Surface: Canvas
Dimension: 12 X 16
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
I know the left hand side of the mouth is not right.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Any C&C most welcome

billmahler
10-12-2007, 10:41 AM
Anne
You've got a good start going here.
The colors you've chosen work well together.
I'm wondering about the dog's position on the canvas. When I scroll up and down, I find a good picture when his head is slightly covered by the top of the screen.
As you note you've got some issues to resolve with the mouth.
You've got a nice fresh and spontaneous look and feel with the rest of the picture, I hope you can keep that while dealing with them.

mooz49
10-12-2007, 12:16 PM
Thanks Bill ..... I really appreciate you taking the time to comment and give me tips and advice ..... I always seem to be placing my paintings on the wrong spot on the canvas!! .... some day I will learn .... :D
:wave:

kathrynlovespets
10-12-2007, 06:13 PM
funny..i just finished a "blue" border collie myself!

but back to what matters: you could use a bit more contrast and a little more tweaking here and there..the eyes need to be darker with brighter highlights

it's a good start..I like the placement of the dog on the canvas and also the complimentary background color

mooz49
10-13-2007, 05:36 AM
Kate ..... thanks so much for tha advice ..... much appreciated ...... I have been to your site .... you have a great talent ... :wave:

lacieabell
10-13-2007, 03:03 PM
I am not sure how you managed it, but it is sooooo difficult to capture the intelligence of an animal, especially domestic dogs, in a painting...but you did! Good job!

mooz49
10-13-2007, 03:35 PM
lacieabell .... thank you so much ..... :wave:

PainterWoman
10-15-2007, 01:44 AM
Glad I finally found you!!!!
You certainly ocaptured a lot of personality. I agree with billmahler that the top of the collie's head looks toooooo flat. Even if his head IS that flat, it looks odd to me (even more than his mouth!) It is so hard to paint dark, furry pets. I think I may have to get my cat a bleach job!

mooz49
10-15-2007, 04:16 AM
Hi Dana ...... it's really lovely to "see" you here on WetCanvas. Thanks for your advice about the collie ...... I will look at the top of the head again ..... :wave:

ejtupi
10-15-2007, 04:38 AM
I looked at a bunch of pictures of border collies and only saw one that had the flat head look, but there the collie still had tufts of fur sticking up near the insertion of the inner edges of the ears, so the flat head aspect was minimized. Virtually every photo I looked at showed the collies with their ears up, looking perky.
Two things here:
1) Maybe you should verify that you have the grain of the fur on the top of the head going in a natural direction. This dog seems to have a kind of ambiguous pattern on the fur and, if anything, looks sort of like someone wet his hair down and got it to clump. Maybe giving some elevation to the hair would eliminate the "hit with a frying pan" look.
2) The light area that starts above his eyes (do dogs have foreheads?) continues down through the muzzle and defines a roughly rectangular area, further emphasizing the flattening of his (her?) skull on top. This might be more evident to you if you look at your photo in either grayscale or black and white.

mooz49
10-15-2007, 11:23 AM
ejtupi ..... thank you so much for your advice ..... much appreciated ..... now to fix that head .....:wave:

mooz49
10-17-2007, 07:23 AM
Posting an update on this one ...... as usual C&C most welcome ..... :wave:

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/17-Oct-2007/27632-Border_Collie.jpg

ejtupi
10-17-2007, 09:20 AM
Beautiful. Especially the way you finished the muzzle/nose area. This puppy has really come alive. 9.5/10. (Maybe still needs just a hint of the fur in the white on the muzzle's left side... still, this picture is a major winner in my book!)

mooz49
10-17-2007, 01:13 PM
Thanks ejtupi ....appreciate your help ...... :wave:

Candices_Creations
10-17-2007, 03:10 PM
Mooz..he's terrific...especially with the changes you made. Great expression..i love his eyes...

mooz49
10-17-2007, 05:55 PM
Candice .... thank you so much ..... :wave:

PainterWoman
10-17-2007, 07:41 PM
I like him much more in this "incarnation"! Especially nice work on the mouth... And who new that Border Collies could get "hat hair."

2bears
10-17-2007, 07:51 PM
When I saw the first post I had to chuckle! I mean that border collies are so full of energy and that first rough painting captured the fact that a fleeting moment is all a person can get for posing that breed!
I do like the second image too, but somehow I didn't get the same emotional reaction as I did when I saw the first one.
:clap: first rate!

mooz49
10-18-2007, 05:24 AM
Dana and Patricia ..... thank you ..... :wave:

mooz49
12-04-2007, 07:23 AM
Hi all .... I just wanted to tell you that I entered this chappie into a local Art Exhibition in our town and he came third so thank you all so much for your help and advice. WetCanvas is the best place to learn with all the help freely given from all you great artists. :heart: :wave:

eringaard
12-04-2007, 09:30 AM
wow!!! amazing!

MRSBB
12-04-2007, 11:40 AM
Mooz49 Congradulations on the win, it's a nice painting. Keep having fun...........Lenore

kathrynlovespets
12-04-2007, 11:49 AM
the update is much improved..the eyes really stand out now

PainterWoman
12-04-2007, 04:00 PM
Congratulations! Can't win if you don't enter. How brave to put yourself, your pup and your painting "out there" for all to see. Way to go!

mooz49
12-05-2007, 04:00 AM
Thanks so much Marcel, Lenore, Kate and Dana ..... :wave: