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audgie
10-11-2007, 04:56 AM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/10-11-2007/104162_ellftizz.jpg

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/10-11-2007/104162_EllaFitz.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Ella
Year Created: 2007
Medium: Oil
Surface: Canvas
Dimension: 24x36
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
A simple portrait of the late, great ella fitzgerald.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
does the piece need more detail?

connievanwinssen
10-11-2007, 06:26 AM
The eye on the left (for us) is way too low. Now it looks like she has a gigantic nose and her eyelid seems to be her cheek.

thomas w
10-11-2007, 09:12 AM
I think the proportions are alright. The nostril on our right side could be fixed, her eye and nose seem to be connected. And the mouth/cheek/chin area could use some refining. Otherwise, not bad.
Thomas W

La_
10-11-2007, 11:10 AM
very cool idea for a portrait and i like it alot

worth tweaking a teeny bit more tho ... getting that shadow line joining eyebrow to nose ... letting her left cheek be the one full shape that it is and toning down the brightness of it a bit ... moving the ring finger over a little bit. turn her and the photo upside down for a bit, look closely at the shapes ... you're very close.
her mouth and right eye/nose is great ad the neon 'Ella' is marvelous (tho i really hope you've overcropped the photo - a frame might cover some of her name otherwise)
good job!

la

audgie
10-13-2007, 08:42 PM
Thank you for the positive crits. I refined it and will post a new pic soon!

AJ

D.W. Flint
10-13-2007, 10:47 PM
Ditto....The eye on the left (for us) is way too low. Now it looks like she has a gigantic nose and her eyelid seems to be her cheek.

audgie
11-14-2007, 11:45 AM
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/14-Nov-2007/104162-MVC-009F.JPG Hi all! I made some fixes...whaddaya think?

MRSBB
11-14-2007, 09:28 PM
I love Ella, but seems her left eye is too low on her face. I think you might highlight above the eye instead of above the eyebrow..Nice...........Lenore