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mcknight
10-07-2007, 12:14 AM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/10-06-2007/1277_self-far.jpg

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/10-06-2007/1277_self-close.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Self-Portrait
Year Created: 2007
Medium: Oil
Surface: Canvas
Dimension: 24x24 inches
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
It's been a couple years now since allowed myself to pick up the brush. I'm trying to get back into this. Here's a self-portrait I've been working on.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Nothing specific, just looking for any feedback I can get.

Tami Durbin
10-07-2007, 02:09 AM
Hi Dave,

First of all I'd like to let you know that I'm an animal portrait
artist. They're very realistic. I've painted a couple human
portraits, but am still learning them. I paint mostly on
porcelain and fire the paintings in a kiln to bond the paint with
the porcelain.

Soon I'm going to figure out how to post some of my paintings
in my replies, with my husbands help. Just wanted to let you
know a little bit about my painting.

Your self portrait is "super good" :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap:

I like how you alternate your warm and cool temperatures !
You create form very well ! The background is good, nice
temperature, and it includes some of the colors that you have
on your portrait ... super good there !

I have very little to suggest, but I think that everything helps
us learn.

When I'm looking at temperatures and lights and darks, I go
back and forth comparing them. For example I would look at
the forehead on the left, then on the right, noticing where the
light and shadows are.

You want to compare all of the features in this way. This gets
easier and easier. Squinting does help.

My suggestion would be to tone down the light on the side of the
forehead that is on the left side of the monitor. This is the shadow
side, so you would do this by comparing tones and temperatures
on the other side of your forehead. This is really a minor suggestion
as you are a great artist !

The only other thing that I would suggest is also very minor.
I don't know if you have done this or not, for sure. I'm looking
at a computer monitor and cameras aren't always exact.
I would place some of your background color onto your portrait,
taking care to place it in cool temperature spots. Try to place
just a little on the warm side of your face as this helps the
composition. This is truly super minor but will "marry" the
subject with the background.

You have this portrait aced :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap:

Thank you so very much for sharing your art with us ! :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap:

Tami Durbin

Dana Design
10-07-2007, 11:45 AM
Dave, I can't believe you haven't been painting!!! That's a loss for all of us and a real shame. I wondered what had happened to you...life, I suppose, as it happens to all of us.

This portrait is very very good. You haven't lost your touch, I'd say. I looked at the original that I have from several years ago and your face has matured well. That's a compliment!

Hope you pick up the brush again seriously and proceed to a wonderful career. You have it in you!

mcknight
10-08-2007, 12:58 AM
...
Your self portrait is "super good" :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap:

I like how you alternate your warm and cool temperatures !
You create form very well ! The background is good, nice
temperature, and it includes some of the colors that you have
on your portrait ... super good there !



Thanks :-)




I have very little to suggest, but I think that everything helps
us learn.

When I'm looking at temperatures and lights and darks, I go
back and forth comparing them. For example I would look at
the forehead on the left, then on the right, noticing where the
light and shadows are.

You want to compare all of the features in this way. This gets
easier and easier. Squinting does help.

My suggestion would be to tone down the light on the side of the
forehead that is on the left side of the monitor. This is the shadow
side, so you would do this by comparing tones and temperatures
on the other side of your forehead. This is really a minor suggestion
as you are a great artist !



The lighting I have for this is kind of tricky. I'm working from a mirror, using and array of incandescent as well as full spectrum lights that reflect off the ceiling. That plus my tendency to move makes it hard to zero in on shadow and temperature. Why do I torture myself? Perhaps it's because I'm impulsive, sloppy and lazy..but then I wouldn't have it any other way!


The only other thing that I would suggest is also very minor.
I don't know if you have done this or not, for sure. I'm looking
at a computer monitor and cameras aren't always exact.
I would place some of your background color onto your portrait,
taking care to place it in cool temperature spots. Try to place
just a little on the warm side of your face as this helps the
composition. This is truly super minor but will "marry" the
subject with the background.



Unification of that sort (i.e. explicitly using background colours with the foreground colours) makes sense in theory although, with this one I kind of instinctually like how it looks and I'm not so sure I want to mess with it. I'll see how I feel about it in a few days (sometimes time is what it takes to change my mind).

Thanks again for the kudos and the critique is much appreciated!

Dave

mcknight
10-08-2007, 01:03 AM
Dave, I can't believe you haven't been painting!!! That's a loss for all of us and a real shame. I wondered what had happened to you...life, I suppose, as it happens to all of us.



Yeah, stuff happens in life. In my case, it's been for the best and I've had it in my mind, over my hyades, that I would return to painting when I had time and motivation. Hope life has been going well for you.



This portrait is very very good. You haven't lost your touch, I'd say. I looked at the original that I have from several years ago and your face has matured well. That's a compliment!

Hope you pick up the brush again seriously and proceed to a wonderful career. You have it in you!



Thanks so much, Dana! Your faith in me and my abilities is a constant source of inspiration.

Dave

Tami Durbin
10-08-2007, 01:50 AM
Hi Dave,

It's completely OK if you prefer not to change anything on
your portrait :) :) :) :) :)

Your painting is "super good" and it is very difficult to
find anywhere to improve :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap:

Tami

Dhuot
10-08-2007, 09:53 PM
Hey David :clap:
It's been a while !

I like that self portrait, though, I am not sure of the blue and the background at all. It would prolly benefit more with another colour

The light source and skintones are "shocking real" :eek:
A fine work that is !
:)

mcknight
10-09-2007, 10:20 AM
Hi Dave,

It's completely OK if you prefer not to change anything on
your portrait :) :) :) :) :)

Your painting is "super good" and it is very difficult to
find anywhere to improve :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap:

Tami

Thanks Tami. Your arrays of applause and smilies are wonderful day-starters.

mcknight
10-09-2007, 10:24 AM
Hey David :clap:
It's been a while !

I like that self portrait, though, I am not sure of the blue and the background at all. It would prolly benefit more with another colour

The light source and skintones are "shocking real" :eek:
A fine work that is !
:)

Hey Daniel,

Yeah, it's been a while! I like the work you've been doing lately.

The photo of the painting isn't so good so you may not be seeing the full range of colour. I've attached a new image that hopefully better conveys the balance of colour.

Thanks for the comments,
Dave

allanom
10-09-2007, 02:49 PM
Beautifully done, of course. I think the background is terrific too.

Just one nit: with such a face-on, intense pose, it would be good to ensure that the eyes of the portrait are really making contact with the viewer. It appears to me that both eyes -- but especially the left (as viewed) are slightly off. Posting the close-up with minor suggested changes, i.e.: moving both irises left slightly and repeating the highlight on the left one, for symmetry.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/09-Oct-2007/4031-mcknight_self-closeA.jpg

mcknight
10-09-2007, 04:29 PM
Beautifully done, of course. I think the background is terrific too.

Just one nit: with such a face-on, intense pose, it would be good to ensure that the eyes of the portrait are really making contact with the viewer. It appears to me that both eyes -- but especially the left (as viewed) are slightly off. Posting the close-up with minor suggested changes, i.e.: moving both irises left slightly and repeating the highlight on the left one, for symmetry.


Excellent observations about the eyes, Allan. It never occurred to me but, you're right, the eyes should not be missing the viewer. I may well drag myself back to the easel for this.

Thanks for your comments! And thanks for posting that Dalai Lama Shoots Adolph Hitler painting - it's great!

Spyderbabe
10-09-2007, 05:31 PM
Good to see you again Dave!
The portrait is compelling but I'm not at all sure about the background. The blues and those big brush strokes give it a very ethereal feeling. Combined with the intensity of the eyes and the soft edges of the shoulders I first thought it a portrait of Michael the Archangel. Theres something about the flying shapes in the bg that enhance that.

Kathleen

mcknight
10-10-2007, 01:55 AM
Good to see you again Dave!
The portrait is compelling but I'm not at all sure about the background. The blues and those big brush strokes give it a very ethereal feeling. Combined with the intensity of the eyes and the soft edges of the shoulders I first thought it a portrait of Michael the Archangel. Theres something about the flying shapes in the bg that enhance that.

Kathleen

I'm glad you're pleased to see me again. When you say you're not sure about the background, I'm not sure whether you like it or dislike it. I kind of like that ethereal feeling.

Thanks for the comments!
Dave

Paulafv
10-10-2007, 02:41 PM
Excellent painting/portrait. Good job. Hope to see more. I think I'd like a crop between the close up and the original to eliminate some of the background...for the next one. (Now that you've found yourself a free model.)

mcknight
10-11-2007, 01:08 PM
Excellent painting/portrait. Good job. Hope to see more. I think I'd like a crop between the close up and the original to eliminate some of the background...for the next one. (Now that you've found yourself a free model.)

Thanks for the praise and comments.
Dave

tbezesky
10-11-2007, 04:49 PM
very intense expression, great form, color and light!
I really the boldness of the eyes!

mcknight
10-11-2007, 05:37 PM
very intense expression, great form, color and light!
I really the boldness of the eyes!

Thanks! You like the eyes? :eek: That's great..glad they don't scare you off :)

Dave

tbezesky
10-11-2007, 11:41 PM
If they did that would be okay too. :thumbsup:

colourburst
10-12-2007, 12:22 AM
you look like a morph of both my nephews, seriously. The skin tones and shades are fantastically done, you look worried though, the eyes look scared and a bit frightening, if that's what you wanted to convey you managed it.

mcknight
10-12-2007, 11:23 AM
you look like a morph of both my nephews, seriously. The skin tones and shades are fantastically done, you look worried though, the eyes look scared and a bit frightening, if that's what you wanted to convey you managed it.

My only intention was to convey the experience. Self-portraiture is a bit scary and the model can be frightening. Thanks.