Sculpture Series- 3

[orange0127]

MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/05-13-2002/8859_Han_Sculpture_%232_wc.jpg


http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/05-13-2002/8859_Han_Sculpture_%232_clost_up_wc.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Sculpture Series- 3
Year Created: 2001
Medium: Pencil
Surface: Paper
Dimension: 18x24
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
I did this about 6 months ago, i have been drawing/painting for 14 months. i'm trying to put a portfolio together for art schools.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
As much critque as possible please :)

[Paul J.S., FCM]

This is very good, especially after only 8 months of drawing. What kind of instruction have you had so far?
Except that I would suggest softening some of the heavy lines where planes turn into the shadows, there is nothing that needs to be changed here.
What art schools are you interested in, and what do you know about their requirements for a portfolio? My portfolio when I first applied to the Art Institute of Chicago contained a landscape, an interior and a figure study. But that was a lifetime ago, and schools have changed since.
The first drawing and painting instruction I had there was all from plaster casts of sculpture.

[orange0127]

Thanks Paul for you reply!
Yes, i agree that softening some of those heavy lines would be a nice touch.
I took an art class in high school, but that was nothing compared to the past 14 months. I started taking private lessons with a world-class oil painter. Since then i've been painting/drawing almost everyday.
The art school i'm interested in is Art Center College of Design, located in Pasadena, CA.
They require about 20 pieces for Illustration majors. A lot of figure drawings, some quick sketches and pieces that show personality/style/idea.
Here is another piece. Did it about 2 months ago, 18x24, pencil, 16 hours. Critique this one too!

Keith:p

[Paul J.S., FCM]

Squint and you can see that the shading on everything but the two items closest to the foreground is consistent. But these two are harsher, as if in a stronger light.
Can't tell if the one to the viewer's left is a bead or a bowl. It looks faceted. If it were lit by the same light as the large central bowl, it would have light on top, not a shadow.Compare it to the fruit in the box.
The other one of the foreground two is well rounded, except for the dark shadow immediately below the highlight. This makes it look pinched there, but the mouth isn't. If it's supposed to be rounded, then lighten that shadow.
It's okay to have different styles at the same time, but not usually in the same piece.
Who is your instructor?