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tremblad
12-12-2006, 10:24 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/12-12-2006/45252_2006-12-12,_21_49_54.jpg

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/12-12-2006/45252_2006-12-12,_21_50_54.jpg

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/12-12-2006/45252_2006-12-12,_21_50_21.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Last rays of fall
Year Created: 2006
Medium: Acrylic
Surface: Wood
Dimension: 14x18
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
I tried, once again, to follow Dsimons technic. On my last post on WetCanvas, David told me to forget about forms and things and focus on values. This is what I tried here.

The first photo is my final result. The second one is the result after 30 minutes (value studies) and the last one is the result after 60 minutes. The overall work took about 90 minutes.

I must specify that I only work with primaries. This is why the value study shows blue and violet and other strange colors. It is not easy for me to produce the same brown/beige.

I'm not unhappy with it. Doesn't look too bad IRL.

Now the title

Along the path
The last rays of fall
Enlight the fence

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Still learning. Anything.

tremblad
12-12-2006, 10:26 PM
Here the reference picture if you want to compare ...

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/12-Dec-2006/45252-2006-12-12,_21_52_03.jpg

dsimons
12-12-2006, 11:28 PM
Im flattered that you would consider my approach. The value study looks really good, As you continue, pay close attention to the edges (soft, hard, lost and broken and maybe let some of the paint already there show thru.
hope thats helpful.

shahid hussain
12-13-2006, 07:17 AM
Hi Daniel,
It's wonderful! just love it.......

bpc
12-13-2006, 03:04 PM
Your painting is great..really nice homey feeling...Your foto is great as a foto......Hey dsimons..can you give me some help!!

dsimons
12-13-2006, 07:44 PM
Im happy to help and learn on this site. bpc are your from Niargra Falls Can. or US. I was born and grew up in N.Falls Can.

Im anxious to see how the painting on this thread turns out.

tremblad
12-14-2006, 06:27 AM
Thank you to you three for your comment ... I REALLY appreciate.

David, you're telling me to pay attention to edges. I really like those lost/broken edges. I recognize myself in them. Do you see a problem with that?

I will not be able to paint for the next day so an update might come but in a week or so.

Now my self analysis ...

I wonder if I have really finished or not. See below the area where there could be some improvement ...

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/14-Dec-2006/45252-MWSnap_2006-12-14,_06_07_34.jpg

1 - I don't really like the foreground. I work wet on wet and mix the paint on the canvas with my knife. My first strokes were better than that IMO ans the more I played with it, the messier it became.

2 - There is no clear difference in value and color between the fence and the background.

3 - No continuity between what appear below and above the fence here. Looks like we are not looking at the same background ...

4 - I don't like that tree. Need rework.

At this time, I just wonder if I should only consider this one as an exercice and go on with another attempt OR try to improve it ... Don't want to overwork (not my style anyway).

I'm also telling myself that the composition is not the best here. The fence leads the eye out to the left of the painting. The tree at the left served as a stopper and tries to bring back the eye to the upper center. Not sure it works ...

Your comments / advices are more than appreciated ...

osidianrose
12-17-2006, 06:01 PM
Overall, I think you did a really good job. I think the darks need to be darker. The shadows in the area that you marked as 1 are not present.

SherylG
12-17-2006, 07:35 PM
I think it's a great value study! The colors are vibrant. The 4 problem areas you have circles could use some attention, but it's a very nice impressionist work.

dsimons
12-17-2006, 08:35 PM
Daniel, if you squint and look at the photo you will see that you have lost the values in the shadows under the fence, you might try to restate them.
A good way to know when a painting is finished is when it looks like the subject when your squining, Never squint at your painting only the subject.
Hope thats helpful.
However this piece is coming along nicely

SilverLady
01-19-2007, 01:08 PM
I love it just as it is.

Sometimes, I think we need to paint something and then just leave it alone.

SilverLady

tremblad
01-19-2007, 01:36 PM
Thanks to everyone for your kind comments. I forgot about this post ... I realize that I did not post my last update on this. Didn't do much, didn't correct everything but I declare it finished (anyway, since I don't sell and I will not hang this one, better work on another project).

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/19-Jan-2007/45252-2007-01-15,_20_50_56.jpg