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Erik
11-19-2005, 01:37 PM
Here's the plein air work - 9x12 oil on canvas panel. I felt that the darks were too dark and that the values didn't reflect atmospheric distance so I lightened them in the studio work.

http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y18/nitkinas/Ringwood8.jpg

The studio work: 16 x 24 oil on canvas

http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y18/nitkinas/ringwood.jpg

Erik

Bill Wray
11-19-2005, 09:03 PM
Eric I think you went a little overboard . I like the background, but miss the darks in the water and forground.

coh
11-20-2005, 12:39 PM
I largely agree with Bill here. Love the distant colors in the studio version
but feel it could use some stronger darks in the lower half of the painting.

There is one thing that stands out to my eye and that is the main tree in
the upper right. Some of this could be the ole jpeg/monitor problem but there
are 2 problems (I think): 1) it looks too much like a "ball on a stick". Not so
much that it's so symmetrical (some trees are) but the way you've painted
the light on it makes it look like a smooth ball to me - very gradual blended
transition from highlight to darks. Contrast that with the plein air sketch
in which you've got a more realistic (IMO) transition with stronger contrasts
and more of a "foliage clumps" appearance. 2) Feels like the colors/tones
in that tree are a little too similar to the much more distant trees, this might
be one area where some darker darks would help. (also maybe those tree
trunks look a little thin to support all that foliage?).

This is a lovely scene and I can see why you were drawn to it. I'd want to
paint there too!

Erik
11-20-2005, 04:01 PM
Thanks Bill & Chris for your helpful suggestions. I might try adding some more drama to the foreground with some darks and rework the tree.

Erik

LDianeJohnson
11-25-2005, 04:20 PM
Erik,

I feel like your studio piece is very strong. Unlike the field sketch which had the same values and intensities from foreground to background, you nailed the delicacy in aerial perspective from the middle to background.

I would be careful not to overdo on richening the very foreground. Just a few accents of darker values - key notes only.

Also, the middle-ground shoreline is a bit hard edged and tends to lift up off the water. Try to straighten parts of this a bit.

Beautiful. Most folks lose the freshness in their studio touches, you handle it well.

Diane

Erik
11-25-2005, 04:53 PM
Diane,

Thanks for the helpful suggestions and encouraging comments!

Erik