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nancymae
01-28-2001, 11:01 PM
This is a pastel done on pastel paper....I believe Canson. Please give me any comments you wish. I am fairly new to pastels and love them!! I also love all the work everyone has done on this forum and now you guys are EXTREMELY talented.

Thanks for your help!!

Nancy
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nancymae
01-28-2001, 11:03 PM
Guess the computer gods are not with me tonight...told you i was a virgin....or need "computer posting for dummies" books!!!

Here goes try #2!!

Nancy
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Gerak
01-29-2001, 03:28 AM
I think it's very nice! Maybe more color in the water would make it more interesting.

LDianeJohnson
01-29-2001, 10:37 AM
You have done a good job technically handling the pastels. Practice a few more images using the same concentration on drawing. Then explore the colors even further.

In this piece, rocks and flowers are nicely done, but observe the variety of warm vs. cool colors within the rocks, and identify other diifferences in value and color. In addition the flower area is nice and the rocks are nice, but because totally different colors were used within both areas creates visual separation. You can solve this by either softening some edges between the two areas or introduce a bit of each area's colors into each other to unify. Create more depth of space in the painting the same way.

Compositionally, you could crop the top of this piece by about half which would bring even more emphasis on the subject. Currently, the eye tends to float out into the space to the left of the flowered hillside rather than stay in the picture.

Lovely work.

Diane

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2001 L. Diane Johnson Plein Air Workshops (http://www.LDianeJohnson.com/workshops)

nancymae
01-30-2001, 02:08 PM
Thanks Diane...I see what you mean about the cropping. It's amazing how you see things after someone else points something out!! Also, I know what you mean about putting the colors in different areas...my digital camera is to blame for this. I'm glad that I posted this before putting it out on art-agent for this reason. I do have some reds down in the rocks, as well as the blues and greys up in the flowers. It really makes the flowers "pop" in person.

Also, another mistake I make was to take my digital picture with no flash but use the existing lighting (regular light bulbs) which put a brownish cast over my painting.
(The paper is actually a blue gray!!)

Thanks, too, Gerak for your comment. I think my photo quality was poor...and some of my colors didn't come through correctly. I do have more colors in the water that did not translate correctly on the digital camera.

Thanks for the support!!! Back to work on my second painting of the Maine coast!!!

Nancy

LDianeJohnson
01-31-2001, 06:59 AM
Nancy,

I know what you mean about shooting with your digital camera and the whole image having a gray cast. You can correct for this easily if you have Photoshop. Some of these pics even come up with a dark gray cast. I don't normally advocate doing this, but try using the "auto adjust" feature in Photoshop or other program. This usually brings the photo back, at least to a place where it is more editable for fine tuning.

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2001 L. Diane Johnson Plein Air Workshops (http://www.LDianeJohnson.com/workshops)