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01-13-2002, 11:44 PM
Year Created: 2001
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!
Digital painting for a child crisis center.
MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Professional quality & craftsmanship. Point out weak areas that need to be improved to meet professional standards.
01-14-2002, 05:36 AM
mswaine an excellent image.
I would like to suggest that the left ear lay back against the head a little more.
The line coming down from the right eye appears to curve down a little more than it should.
There is a line around the form, that line plus the brightness of the background has the form sinking into the background as if it were a soft pillow. This doesn't occur so much with the white shirt as it is so much brighter than the background. mjk
01-14-2002, 10:20 AM
He is glowing so much that he seems to be almost metallic. I would like to see him look a little more HUMAN, (especially given that this is for a child crisis centre.)
I'm not particularly fond of the name split up around the head like that, either...
I think the ears could be a little less red, as they are very prominent now. There is also a strange bump on the left (his left) of the neck.
When I put my hands around the face, obliterating the yellowy background, he becomes a little more approachable, so perhaps that colour isn't doing much for him. How would a cooler colour look?
Amazing technique and result nevertheless.
01-14-2002, 12:45 PM
Thank you for your cogent comments. I have taken them and altered the image to reflect those comment that were most pertainent. Again thank you for your extra set of eyes.
01-14-2002, 04:35 PM
what was bothering me was the harshness of the boy's face...while I understand that because it's a crisis center, the boy would probably be jaded, I felt that even without the hard strokes and lines in the face, he would still have that look...even more unsettling when seen as a young (8-11?) year old boy.
i softened the hardness and also lightened the laughlines and the darks under his eyes.
01-15-2002, 08:53 AM
I like what arlene did to this. Smoothing out the texture on the face gives this much more unity as a whole. Also it has given more emphasis to the features.
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