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mswaine
01-13-2002, 10:44 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/01-13-2002/4996_JasonEd.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Jason-Portrait
Year Created: 2001
Medium: Digital
Surface: Computer
Dimension: 12x14.4inches
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
Digital painting for a child crisis center.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Professional quality & craftsmanship. Point out weak areas that need to be improved to meet professional standards.

mjkohler
01-14-2002, 04:36 AM
mswaine an excellent image.

I would like to suggest that the left ear lay back against the head a little more.

The line coming down from the right eye appears to curve down a little more than it should.

There is a line around the form, that line plus the brightness of the background has the form sinking into the background as if it were a soft pillow. This doesn't occur so much with the white shirt as it is so much brighter than the background. mjk

ArtyHelen
01-14-2002, 09:20 AM
He is glowing so much that he seems to be almost metallic. I would like to see him look a little more HUMAN, (especially given that this is for a child crisis centre.)

I'm not particularly fond of the name split up around the head like that, either...

I think the ears could be a little less red, as they are very prominent now. There is also a strange bump on the left (his left) of the neck.

When I put my hands around the face, obliterating the yellowy background, he becomes a little more approachable, so perhaps that colour isn't doing much for him. How would a cooler colour look?

Amazing technique and result nevertheless.

Helen

mswaine
01-14-2002, 11:45 AM
Thank you for your cogent comments. I have taken them and altered the image to reflect those comment that were most pertainent. Again thank you for your extra set of eyes.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/14-Jan-2002/JasonEd2.jpg

arlene
01-14-2002, 03:35 PM
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/14-Jan-2002/JasonEd21.jpg

what was bothering me was the harshness of the boy's face...while I understand that because it's a crisis center, the boy would probably be jaded, I felt that even without the hard strokes and lines in the face, he would still have that look...even more unsettling when seen as a young (8-11?) year old boy.

i softened the hardness and also lightened the laughlines and the darks under his eyes.

skumble
01-15-2002, 07:53 AM
I like what arlene did to this. Smoothing out the texture on the face gives this much more unity as a whole. Also it has given more emphasis to the features.