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Laurie2
08-28-2005, 09:31 AM
The tide is out at the slipway and two children wait impatiently

Reference photo the slipway at Carlingford, Co. Louth Ireland
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/28-Aug-2005/56900-image009.jpg

I want to see beyond the wall so will remove it....

Laurie2
08-28-2005, 09:33 AM
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/28-Aug-2005/56900-SLIP.jpg
scanned image

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/28-Aug-2005/56900-first.jpg
digital photo
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/28-Aug-2005/56900-second.jpg
digital photo

the picture needs another element I think...I read somewhere there should be an uneven number of elements to keep the eye moving (?)

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/28-Aug-2005/56900-gulls2b.jpg
digital photo

and more perspective
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/28-Aug-2005/56900-SCAN.jpg
scanned in 2 parts...not true colours

Yorky
08-29-2005, 04:46 AM
I suggest you try adding some shadows to give the painting punch, Laurie.

Otherwise it's a very nice composition.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/29-Aug-2005/1046-AslipLaurieDSE.jpg

Doug

Laurie2
08-29-2005, 04:58 AM
Ah Yes....That is what is needed......Thankyou Yorky....... :)

Laurie2
08-29-2005, 11:58 PM
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/30-Aug-2005/56900-Pict0010.jpg

I feel that the sun is over my right shoulder as I stand slightly to the right of the picture...the wall the children are perched on is facing the sun...now for those elusive shadows...darks are always a problem to me...sigh :o

ponting
08-30-2005, 12:17 AM
Hi Laurie. This is a great thread and I love to see your thought process here an love the way you have succeeded in changing the perspective. I feel that looking at the depth of the boat...t seems a little small for he size of the children or the children a little large for the boat. They appear more adult sized to me. The standing gull looks a little staged where he is. He might be a little more comfortable on the edge of the boat. Perhaps just alighting?

Cheers, Di

Laurie2
08-30-2005, 12:30 AM
Hi Laurie. This is a great thread and I love to see your thought process here an love the way you have succeeded in changing the perspective. I feel that looking at the depth of the boat...t seems a little small for he size of the children or the children a little large for the boat. They appear more adult sized to me. The standing gull looks a little staged where he is. He might be a little more comfortable on the edge of the boat. Perhaps just alighting?

Cheers, Di


:) Thank you so much for your thoughts...Yes that gull has got to go!
but...what to do with oversized kids or under-sized boats...there's the rub....perhaps I could call them adults and get away with it...:)
Any thoughts on how to get me out of trouble?... :D

Is it just the depth of the boat or the overall size? :confused:

ponting
08-30-2005, 12:42 AM
Nothing the matter with adults....perhaps they are kids at heart! :p

Actually I think it is the overall size but you can get away with it as who is to say from that angle just what size of boat it is.

Cheers, Dianna

Laurie2
08-30-2005, 01:10 AM
Nothing the matter with adults....perhaps they are kids at heart! :p

Actually I think it is the overall size but you can get away with it as who is to say from that angle just what size of boat it is.

Cheers, Dianna


Phew...that's what I wanted to hear...:)....BTW the gull has already been erased...:) the paper is drying as we speak :)

It's good to have a different view of things and I really do appreciate your input Dianna.. :clap:

Camellia Sinensis
08-30-2005, 08:00 AM
A nice, peaceful scene. One little suggestion: there is a pale spot within the legs of one of the children, as if he was sitting on a white rock. I think this area should be shaded

Laurie2
08-30-2005, 06:53 PM
A nice, peaceful scene. One little suggestion: there is a pale spot within the legs of one of the children, as if he was sitting on a white rock. I think this area should be shaded


Aha...I see it ;) ....Thanks for that Camellia....now I can take the final photo as there is really not much more I can do with this one.....:wave: I'm off to my Spatter Lesson now.

CharM
08-30-2005, 07:26 PM
Hi Laurie... as much as I hate to say this, you can still go darker with your shadows... aside from that, this is a really nice composition...

Now... as to the size of your boat (or your children)... living on a small lake, we have a variety of water craft... we do have a very small sail boat that looks remarkably like your own... So, I feel that it's ok! :D :D :D Ours is red... :D

Laurie2
08-30-2005, 07:42 PM
Hi Laurie... as much as I hate to say this, you can still go darker with your shadows... aside from that, this is a really nice composition...

Now... as to the size of your boat (or your children)... living on a small lake, we have a variety of water craft... we do have a very small sail boat that looks remarkably like your own... So, I feel that it's ok! :D :D :D Ours is red... :D


Thank you Charm....I was so taken up with positioning shadows I got scared of going dark....
I will go darker...holding my breath......:)

mmcaloon
08-30-2005, 08:30 PM
Thanks for sharing you WIP I can't tell how much I appreaciate them. I've that to others I know, but really mean it.

Laurie2
08-30-2005, 09:46 PM
Thanks Mike....I enjoy doing things I can share ...and it also helps to hear other's impressions of my stuff...here is the last photo...I have taken on board all of http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/30-Aug-2005/56900-Pict0002.jpg the above tips and hints and hope it shows...:)

Uh Oh....I still see that pesky gull's shadow :( ...but mebbe it's because I looked to see if he had really gone...it does not show on the original they way it does here in this photo...sigh

ponting
08-30-2005, 10:26 PM
Oh yes, I like that darkness Laurie. It adds so much dimention to the scene. You know exactly how that wall works now. I don't see your gull shadow. You did a great job of explunging him. :D

Take care.....Dianna

Camellia Sinensis
08-30-2005, 11:26 PM
I really love it now! This WIP was very instructive, thanks for sharing it with us. :clap:

Yorky
08-31-2005, 02:16 AM
Well done, Laurie - remember bright sunshine = dark well defined shadows.

Hazy sunshine = pale, ill defined shadows.

Your scene needed bright sunshine.

Doug

Laurie2
08-31-2005, 02:32 AM
Thankyou Yorky....Gosh...you are up early or are you up late?...:)
4.31 p.m. here in NSW and I think I can safely say the slipway painting is finished don't you.
The feedback I received was very heartening and some even thought it was a useful exercise so I am well pleased. :D

Bringing the painting forward so that I can see it again :)

Laurie2
08-31-2005, 02:40 AM
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/30-Aug-2005/56900-Pict0002.jpg

I am quite pleased with it...:)

Yorky
08-31-2005, 02:51 AM
And so you should be :D

Was 7 am here - now post it in the Gallery/Thubnail Gallery ;)

Doug

Laurie2
08-31-2005, 03:49 AM
And so you should be :D

Was 7 am here - now post it in the Gallery/Thubnail Gallery ;)

Doug

OK...Just sqeezed into the August Gallery...it is still August 31st here..:)