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dollardays
12-02-2004, 12:18 AM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/12-01-2004/3589_Girls_064final-small.jpg

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/12-01-2004/3589_5x7Carey-small.jpg

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/12-01-2004/3589_5x7-maureen-small.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Carey and Maureen, Two Sisters
Year Created: 2004
Medium: Oil
Surface: Linen
Dimension: 12 x 16
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
Painted from two separate reference photos apparently taken years apart. Turned one girl's head as her nose appeared huge head on and it helped the composition a bit.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
I hanged the compiostion a bit when I was finished with this and I would like to know if it reads well now. Or anything else you might have done differently. i had to stay with the head and shoulders shot because that's the only reference I had.

Artistanne
12-02-2004, 09:35 AM
Wow, you certainly can tell they are sisters--I don't think I could ever possibly get 2 people to look alike if I tried. :)

The only thing that bothers me a bit is the arm of the girl on the right at the middle of the canvas. It seems like you shouldn't see her skin quite like that, or if you did, like the arm should be bigger or something. But otherwise, I think it looks great. Nice work.

Londondeon
12-02-2004, 12:19 PM
Great portraits. I do agreee about the arm. Just bring the sleeve down and conceal the skin would work. I would also like to see some lighted highlight on the forehead of the woman on the left. If the one on the right has that much light on her face, then the one on the left should have similar highlight, even if she is tanner.

Composition is nice too. Maybe tone down the brightness of the collumn on the right so it doesn't compete with the foreground.

Good work :)
Londondeon

dollardays
12-03-2004, 11:49 PM
Thanks for having a look, Anne and londondeon. :)

Nora

Marinathesecond
12-04-2004, 11:04 AM
What I like most about this portrait is the expression you've captured...sisters that look happy to be together. Good work!
I agree with the comments about the arm, and light on the forehead, and might also suggest that the distant pillar seems slightly out of whack...but this is just nit-picking. Was this a commission? Hope they like it as much as I do.
m2