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Oils
11-28-2004, 04:22 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/11-28-2004/6802_Still_Life.jpg

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/11-28-2004/6802_Close1.jpg

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/11-28-2004/6802_Close2.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Apple and Oranges
Year Created: 2002
Medium: Oil
Surface: Canvas
Dimension: 12 X 9
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
This is only the second oil painting I've done in over twenty-five years, and I'm trying to relearn what I used to know. It's not coming back as easily as I'd hoped. Feel free to give creative comments where needed. I'm aware the fruit look like they're floating and that the shadows are not in line with the highlights on the fruit. I made the mistake of painting the fruit first when I should have been concentrating on what was happening in the background.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
I know my painting has problems, but what could I do the next time to improve my work? I have lots of trouble with brushwork and basic painting technique. What can I do to improve my skills?

TauCetiV
11-28-2004, 05:48 PM
well I wrote then I went back and read what you said so then I am skipping it and giving you these two links :) I lurk in here sometimes so I can learn some stuff :) I hope you enjoy it.
http://www.wetcanvas.com/forums/showthread.php?t=146668&highlight=sovek
http://www.wetcanvas.com/forums/showthread.php?t=149669&highlight=sovek
The book is available somewhere on the internet-- ya have to be faithful and do the exercises each one... I am sure the people in the forum know where. Have you already varnished the painting? Adding shadows would immediately add depth. I made an apple painting and my apples were melting...keep painting and everything and more will come back!

Esmeralinda
11-28-2004, 06:15 PM
Hello
I don't think your painting is as bad as you say. I agree that you have to work on your shadows/values (fruits and table) but I enjoy your colours and light. Mayby the background could be lighter and more interesting also.

Good advice from TauCetiV. Keep up your good creativity.

Linda :)

Tamana
11-28-2004, 07:23 PM
You've already had some good advice and I'm not qualified in still life, so I'll just say that I really enjoy your play of light. It's very consistent and your sense of balance defined. I'd watch the shadowing to make certain it too is consistent with the light source...

Londondeon
11-29-2004, 12:26 AM
Good beginnings. Sometimes it is hard to gradiate the shadows and be bold enough with them. In the top piece I have made some modifications. I think with the boldness of the fruit and the wonderful highlights on it you need strong shadows. I have also angled the back edge of the table so it is not parallel and perpendicular to the edges of the canvas, which in this case is too distracting. Great series. I like it! :clap:
Londondeon

LisaArt
11-29-2004, 06:15 AM
Very good work for your second oil painting.

Oils
11-29-2004, 01:38 PM
I responded but my response didn't show up, I'll try again.

TauCetiV-I checked out the Sovek links and I believe I'll get the book and give it a try. I think it may help with my shading and drop shadow problems.

Esmeralinda and Tamana-Thank you very much for your kind responses.

Londondeon-You solved my problem! There has been something about this painting that was bothering me, (besides the obvious ones with shading and shadow) but I just couldn't see what it was. You fixed the problem with your modification when you tilted the back of the table so it wasn't horizontal, problem solved. Now it looks correct. Thank you!

LisaArt-Thank You! Actually it's my second oil painting in over 25 years, I painted in the 1970's. I also did an alla prima self portrait that I wasn't too happy with in 2000, it too suffers from poor shadows/shading.