Gosephi's Dream

[MountainSong]

Oil on Gallery Wrap Canvas
16 by 20 inches
or
40cm by50cm

Side shot shows the gallery wrap.

Comments Welcomed and Critiques embraced.
:D
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[Treece]

Definitely NOT crap!

[shinobi]

3 words. Swanky. Cool. Groovy. :cool:

[Tamana]

Dang, Shinobi beat me to all the couls wordages ;)

I really like the palette on this one - but the line work is what captures my attention. The smaller looks very dimensional and provides a shattering effect such as glass or panes thereof - good call on the shadowing of them.

[MountainSong]

Treece - Thanks for the vote of confidence. Really. Your first post ever even! You should get a prize or something.
(I wish I didn't agree with your last word so much.)

Shinobi - your the bomb Dude. When I look at it through your eyes I feel better about it.

Tamana - Thanks for being in the car when we hit the bottom of the track Gal. Maybe we're on the way back up now. :rolleyes:

[chandlerjr]

MountainSong,
I really like this, but I do have some crits. However, let's talk about what I like first.

You have started growing your palette of colors getting away from the yellow, reds, siennas--moving into some cooler colors. I really like linear division of your canvas and how you paralleled that with the alternating use of warm and cool colors. This is one of your better pieces.

Now my crits: You developed this nice linear flow even mixing in unattached, short strokes of colored lines. Then, you suddenly put in distracting and weak curves of color right in the center as well as the sides--distracting from the great linear flow you had going. I think it would have been better if you had made those thick brush strokes straight lines.

Having said this (no bull)--I still like it alot.
Larry C.

[Bisco]

I like it better from the side pic .. I dont know why..

[Mary Woodul]

I love your color palette and there is something from the side view that is very interesting and more intricate. It is the lower right bottom area. I don't know if that is what Larry expresses also about the straight lines instead of the organic figures.

[Tamana]

Tamana - Thanks for being in the car when we hit the bottom of the track Gal. Maybe we're on the way back up now. :rolleyes:


I thought that's what we were here for? To encourage and support one another in this arting of life no matter what...good or bad (as subjective as it is), smooth or rough? No? ;)

It's my pleasure.

[themanda]

i see beautiful birds flying out of a broken window. industrial hope. urban renewal.

:D great job!!!

[pearlgirl]

MS...great to see you experimenting with a different palette.

I have come back to this several times trying to decide what niggles at me with it. IMHO...(novice one)... the two big brush strokes dead centre are in the way of where my eye wants too settle. I am wondering if removing/reworking the top part of them would open up the composition and free the under geometrical shapes. Take it or leave it. :wink2:

Beautiful take on it Amanda.
I think this is close to being another great one.
*L*

[MountainSong]

Chandlerjr - Wow, Talk about making lemonade out of lemons! Thanks to your words and the other generous people here - I don't dislike this piece (of cr**) as much as I did yesterday -which was a pretty depressing day. The problem has to be those broad curvy strokes -but I gotta’ say it wasn’t much better before they went on. It's like there was a good idea in this piece but I just couldn't bring it to maturity. Of course I may be totally wrong as others have seen it and find it to have redeeming attributes! Guess we're our own worse critics. :rolleyes:

Bisco I think I know why - this piece is fairly viewable at 10 to 15 feet -it has a certain something to it which make the viewer come closer to check it out. Unfortunately up close it bites though. The side view puts it further away - so it's better. Thanks for seeing and saying. :)

Mlelevier There's some decent depth there is probably why you find it appealing in that area - also the area is not over worked. The top right ‘in person’ is the Honey Pot but it got messed up in the digital and is dark and almost muddy even. Thanks for your words and insights. :)

Tamana - Yah, having a community like this sure can help with the artist blues. It's good to be singin' again! :D

Themanda - Woweii -Zoweii! Well you just proved that no matter what the artist thinks the viewer makes the final call! (Note to self: remember Themanda's example for future reference)

Pearl of a Girl - Yup I think you nailed it. Good for you too - your instinct is getting honed and more finally tuned. Last time I posted you knew something was wrong but weren't sure what...this time you nailed it! This is all going to add up for you on your own work. :D
*L* Amanda's take on it mixed with Shinobi's went a long way towards pulling me out of the funk! Some people just got beautiful minds.

[kathleenfaith]

Hi there

the title caught my name when i looked at the first picture there was something which didnt hit me right but then when i saw the canvas from the side i thought wow it looks good here knowing its on canvas and looks more effective here,,,, i like it great for a bedroom looks a passionate piece too with the pinks going into the blues.....

:clap:

faith