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lein
07-18-2004, 08:39 AM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/07-18-2004/46335_haikusmall.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Haiku
Year Created: 2004
Medium: Other
Surface: Other
Dimension: 10x17
Allow digital alterations?: No, please :)

MY COMMENTS:
Chalk on pice of wallpaper

thoughts: choose media that have the same feel as the subject
canyonlike

larger version: http://home.tiscali.nl/sibillia/copyrighted/haiku.jpg


MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
keep the skypart rough or smooth it?

jerryW
07-18-2004, 08:59 AM
smooth
in keeping with
the initial feeling of awe
and clarity

turlogh
07-18-2004, 12:30 PM
keep the skypart rough or smooth it?
This is lovely.

In order to answer your question, I think I would have to see the piece in person. There isn't any way to tell from a digital image, even the larger one on your site.

Does the roughness convey an impression of an infinity of stars in an endless sky? Then keep it. Does the roughness distract from the overall harmony of the piece? Smooth it.

Michael-Ann
07-18-2004, 01:08 PM
Does the roughness convey an impression of an infinity of stars in an endless sky? Then keep it. Does the roughness distract from the overall harmony of the piece? Smooth it.

Words really well said
Your haiku is beautiful
I like it a lot

lein
07-18-2004, 01:16 PM
OH! Turlogh
thank you for noticing
THANK you's to Michael-Ann too

it is going to stay like this :)