WIP "ME"

[NJean]

MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/02-16-2004/26397_MVC-009F.JPG

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/02-16-2004/26397_MVC-012F.JPG


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: WIP "ME"
Year Created: 2004
Medium: Acrylic
Surface: Paper
Dimension: 8x10
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
working on this.My pictures, though dark hopefully show improvements

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
comments? I will be brightening and smoothing the colors

[mfoxmelanson]

Wow! A definate show of improvement. If it were mine, I'd get rid of the brown on the chest or even crop the bottom of the piece just below the shoulders. In my honest opinion, the lines for the arms and definition of chest distract from your beautiful face. You have achieved a great expression! That's not easy to do!! Fantastic job! Keep going!!!

M.

[artbabe21]

wonderful painting!! love the brushwork & color choices...I would personally fade the body parts into oblivion as in vague/unfinished to keep attention on that beautiful face as stated by M fox...:)

[futurebird]

In my honest opinion, the lines for the arms and definition of chest distract from your beautiful face.

I agree. The chest is a little strange since it looks like you were in a halter top or something-- look in the mirror you won't see shadows like that unless you have on some strange garment. But, I'd also like to add that the smile on the face is wonderful. I wish I could capture a smile like that. Great work!

[jerryW]

the rough quality gives structure
I have no idea why it would need any smoothing.
good work!