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ReNae
10-20-2000, 02:25 PM
(((Mal)))

I have to agree about the red leaf leading the eye out of the pic, but I don't think I would like red leaves all over. Maybe if the red was toned down to the same values as the other leaves.

I love the realism you depicted here and hope you won't lose those wonderful colors.
I'm sure when you do a larger version it will be magnifico!

Warmth,
ReNae

CindyAgathocleous
10-20-2000, 02:32 PM
Great work! I agree with your teacher's comments. You know if you did decide to repeat the small leaf shape that doesn't mean that they all have to be red... touches of red can go into the background and the new leaf shapes can be any color you like.

16"x20" sounds nice!!!

C~

Katee
10-20-2000, 05:43 PM
Mal
Did your teacher mean the red leaf at the bottom left or top left?

IMHO the top red leaf although leading out of the painting,the central veins leads to the leaf below and my eyes then follow the central veins of that leaf.

The bottom red leaf, leads me into the painting as the pointed leaves face inwards.

Yes Mal, it was great fun, I did it all in one day (couldn't put it down) and then had to rush around preparing the evening meal. I learnt a lot from it, even though I don't like my end result.

Let me know if you do another one.

Best wishes

Karen http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif

Dennis
10-20-2000, 06:14 PM
Mal, I'm to new at this so won't critique it other than to say that I really like it. I don't think I would repeat the small leaf. I like it there by itself. Creates lots and lots of comments - so it has achieved its purpose - interest. I'm really glad you want to do a 16 x 20 of it. Large ones are a lot of fun - Gosh, are you going to buy a bigger brush? lol Dennis

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oleCC
10-20-2000, 07:22 PM
Hi Mal... like I said in our conversation, the bottom red leaf bothers me a bit ..on my own painting too. To me, it looks dis-jointed without having more of that red in touches in the background...maybe hints of red points that are barely visable ?!
If I ever do another one, on clayboard, at least I know I can "erase" anything that just doesn't work (grin)
Good luck on the doing the bigger one, anxious to see that http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif Carol

MALARKEY
10-21-2000, 12:38 AM
Sorry to make one more post. I brought my leaf painting to watercolor class last night. Since no others showed up, the teacher and I spent most of the time critiquing this painting. While over all she liked the painting, she found fault with the red in the small leaf. She thought the red should be carried out in touches all over the painting. Also the small leaf shape should of been repeated in the painting several more times. Her other major point was the small red leaf on the side of the painting leads your eye out of the painting.
The good points she mentioned were the dominance of lines through out the painting. The contrast of colors. She took a blank paper and cut a one inch square out of the middle. She used this square to run inch by inch over the painting to see if every inch had color and or value changes. According to her I had done this very well.
Please tell me what you think. I am thinking of doing this over again and going up from 11x14 to 16x20 size. I scanned this much of the painting so you can see closely the area I'm talking about. Thanks for looking, Sandy

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CarlyHardy
10-24-2000, 12:07 AM
Hello everyone...I'm home! Had a wonderful time in Vermont where I did see a lot of red and yellow and green and just about every color leaves!

The size of the red leaf bothered me with the original photo...so I just made it bigger..of course, everything gets bigger in my paintings. And I used the same red in the red edges around the other leaves to repeat the color some too.

You could do the repeat of that color in the background or in touches around the other leaves if you wanted to repeat it more. Sometimes one color used as an accent in a strategic location can be very dramatic. The location of the one leaf is the problem that I see more than the color, but since you were going for realism...you accomplished it wonderfully! The leaf doesn't lead me out of the painting but it does command a visual focal point.
carly