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djstar
12-07-2003, 12:39 AM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/12-06-2003/1730_woman2art.jpg


http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/12-06-2003/1730_womanbaskdet2.jpg

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/06-Dec-2003/1730-woman2headart.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Mexican Street Woman
Year Created: 2003
Medium: Watercolor
Surface: Paper
Dimension: 22x19
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
Tipped her for her photo. 300# CP left over from the bus painting of last night.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Happy.
dj*

pero lane
12-07-2003, 12:54 PM
WOW!!!! Beautifully done!!!:clap: :clap:

roberj
12-07-2003, 04:01 PM
YES. Only thought is the back lit string or hair near her nose, I love the effect, but it is a little distracting that close to her nose. Very masterful handling of the medium.

Bob

djstar
12-08-2003, 04:56 AM
ok... the watercolor forum bugged me so it is now thinner, but still there.
It was such a hot dry, static electrical day and the light on all those fly-aways was what attracted me to the image.
I may scrape a few thinner ones with a blade to lessen the jarring of it, but I did bring the wash in so it is half its width. I think it should sooth you all. ;)
Thanks for the comments.

If you would, I wouldn't mind comments on the mood of the piece. I eliminated a lot of the clutter but am not sure if there is a vacant feel, rather than a mood.....
discuss...
dj*

xvallarta
12-08-2003, 10:29 AM
The strings coming out of her head are distracting and ruin the rendering.

myles

Rabbit Twilight
12-08-2003, 10:32 AM
Yes, the light area near the nose does distract. It's a beautifully done painting.

jackiesimmonds
12-08-2003, 03:26 PM
The mood of the painting is hard to explain, in truth. The brilliant sunlight makes it feel quite "light"and airy; yet the expression on her face looks "contemplative" - she seems to be resigned - I do feel that "vacant" is quite a good word to describe the feeling, but it is the kind of vacant-ness that an old, patient lady, sitting by the roadside, waiting for someone to buy her goods, might fall into - a sort of vacant reverie, as her thoughts wander.

DJ - PLEASE get rid of the sharp, distracting white line, pointing at her nose. I know you said that you have made it "thinner" - but does it actually help the composition in any way by relating to another part of the composition? No. Is it quite distracting? Yes. Does it look like a fly-away strand of her hair? No.
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/08-Dec-2003/1805-dj.jpg

what do you plan to do with the white area to her right?
J

seedy
12-08-2003, 06:24 PM
Maybe sharpen up the colours of the blouse nearest the neck for a couple of inches letting it go out of focus half way to the shoulder...
Sounds like that hair has got to go...
Good stuff
Brian

Stephen Brealey
12-08-2003, 08:49 PM
I love the feeling of the light in it. Like when it's stormy and the sky is blanketed in grey clouds, but at one point bright sunlight shines through. That's what this feels like. Calm in a storm.

Ceu
12-09-2003, 12:15 AM
djstar

this is beautifullllllll, I just love her expression, she looks like "

"Storm coming
The sky grew grey
The winds started to dance
around her
hair and an old scarf threads
flowing,
and she knew that
it was time
time to go home
before
the winds and rain
before the storm."
Ceu

djstar
12-09-2003, 01:27 AM
we got no WOW icon!
I may have to write that on the back, for immortality.
I am grateful.
dj*

soap
12-09-2003, 02:36 AM
Ooh yes! You got it! Thanks for sharing - your work so often lights up my mood. :D

reynolds
12-09-2003, 10:50 AM
i thought of her as a praying or meditating matriarch...possibly on the stairs of a church.
she thinks it has been rough and yet she has always made it with Mary and her Lord. she will say a Rosary and things will get better. she reminds me of one of the characters in Rain of Gold, a great book.