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MALARKEY
09-26-2000, 11:34 PM
I had a poor quality line drawing to go by for this house. I don't think I quite got it right, but it is just an excersize. this is 3x5inch. thanks for looking, Sandy

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billythekid
09-27-2000, 07:44 AM
To make the scene look more interesting I would have put the house out of the center of the picture, the black clouds at the right top are in my view too dominant, perhaps you could also put a different texture on the green hill behind the house,
the house itself looks pretty good.

Billythekid

Katee
09-27-2000, 05:20 PM
Sandy

I also feel that the black clouds on the right dominate the sky.

I think that you've done a good job in demonstrating the different textures and values in the grassed and hilly areas, and love the tree.

And all fitted in a 3x5 !

A good exercise.

best wishes

Karen http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif

Dennis
09-27-2000, 08:00 PM
Very nice Mal. I don't have a problem with the dark clouds on the right. It's very dramatic. I would darken the grass on the right and perhaps the right side of the house a bit to correspond with the very dark sky on that side. I can't believe you can get so much in so little a space! Dennis

Phyllis Rennie
09-29-2000, 09:09 PM
Wow Mal, that is a black cloud--glad I'm not under it! If you want to keep it, I'd suggest giving it some life--maybe with some purples, and blues. And then add some color and depth to the white clouds too. I think the house looks fine--maybe you could just deepen the shadows.

All in all, it's a sweet little painting and you've gotten in lots of detail already but I think it could use some finishing. For example, at first I thought the darker green to the left was a shadow of the tree (inconsistent with the lighting) but then I decided that it is probably some bushes that just need stems and twigs to define them a bit.

CarlyHardy
10-01-2000, 12:30 AM
It seems to be a sad little house...all boarded up and empty now. You did a really nice job with your drawing...simple and straightforward...just like the house. Now take your hand and cover about one inch of the left side of the pic. Cutting off an inch would put the green tree on the left side...balancing the cloud formation on the right and take the house out of the middle..actually focusing in more on it.

How do you paint this tiny!!!!

carly

artwoman1
10-13-2000, 06:36 PM
I agree on the black cloud being very strong. That could be off-set by having some foliage on the horizon connecting with the left edge of the paper. It could protrude from the left and cross behind the tree or stop just to the left of the tree. It also a stopper for the horizon which could lead the eye right out the painting.



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