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babsalaba2
10-09-2000, 10:25 AM
I would like your feedback on this watercolor.

This was done from a photo of my parents' backyard after an ice storm a few years ago.

I know that I have had "value issues" in the past. I tried to keep this in mind as I painted this. My problem is that I keep forgetting that as they dry, watercolors lighten. The values looked quite a bit darker immediately after I finished than they do now http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif

What should I fix on this painting, and what should I keep as is?

Thanks!

Babs

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babsalaba2
10-09-2000, 10:29 AM
Whew!

Finally, three edits later, I get the image to show!

Thanks,

Babs

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jweir
10-09-2000, 11:59 AM
babsalaba2,

when saving your image, save it as "jpg", not "pdd" browser do not know how to display "pdd" file type

Jim

oleCC
10-10-2000, 12:47 AM
Hi.. This painting is lovely..and I am sure that in the scanning you lost some of the deeper values. It is hard to "critique" this one knowing that, but I just wondered if that snow was so smooth that all the shadows were straight and smooth as well? The shadow of the small tree (leaning to the right) on the right side ... should lean also in a mirror like image.
Nice work and I sure hope to see more!
http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif Carol

Tycho-Brahe
10-10-2000, 09:01 AM
Babs,

Wow ! What a nice ethereal feeling it conveys. http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif I really like the way the light is coming through the trees.

I think the trees are done nicely. Maybe the shadows should be bent now and then to convey a slightly bumpy snow covered landscape for interest ?

If it's not too personal, could you tell us what type of paper and what colors you used ?

Eric

nnelson1
10-10-2000, 11:31 AM
Babs,

Ooooooo! I LIKE it! I've seen many a winter morning just like this myself. The sun is almost blinding...very nice!

Only two critiques:
1) I agree with Carol, I'm sure the scanner lightened some of your darks. If not, I'd suggest a little darkening of the trees.

2) Compositionally, you have a straight line going directly across the near middle of middle of your paper. Try experimenting with your graphics program and moving a "frame" up and down, left and right to try different compositions of the subject.

I REALLY like this and look forward to more of your work.

Cheers!

Nick

bobo
10-10-2000, 03:06 PM
WOW, u hit the feeling of a cold winter morning right on the head.The only thing I would change is to move the sun alil to one side or the other so that the shadows are coming at more of an angle... http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif

babsalaba2
10-10-2000, 03:48 PM
Thank you to all of you for your kind and helpful comments http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif

OleCC & Nick both made comments about the scanned version being somewhat washed-out. it's actually a fairly good scan. I think I didn't glaze enough over the darks. Plus, when I "finished," the piece was still damp, and therefore looked darker. I'm doing another version of it, but I'll make the shadows darker.

Erik & OleCC also mentioned the snow's surface being too smooth; perhaps the shadows need to be bumpier. After really looking at the reference photo, I saw that the shadows weren't as straight as I had done them although the yard is totally flat. Another case of interpreting what we EXPECT to see rather than what we actually see...

Erik- I used Arches Cold Pressed 140 lb paper. Since I am trying to practice with value, I mixed up some puddles of color in varying strengths. I mixed Holbein Indigo, Winsor & Newton Neutral Tint, and Yarka Red Violet.

As for the compositional comments- the horizon line too near the middle and the sunlight too near the center, I noticed both of these things when I was finished. I've adjusted them in the second piece I'm currently working on.

Thank you again for all your help!

Babs

LDianeJohnson
10-10-2000, 06:59 PM
Hi and welcome!
I took a look at your painting and always love this subject with backlighting. You have a great start. I agree with many of the comments above. The fact that you subdued the backmost trees is well done. Here are a couple other things to help make it "sing"...

You can always crop a watercolor painting into a new composition. Following is a jpg showing just one adaptation of your painting in another position. In addition to 'mirroring' the shadows, add the shadowed branches as well. This allows you to break up the trunks in the show and keep the viewer's eye in the painting.

I also moved the middle three to the left a bit so it was not exactly centered between the two middle trees.

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Like to see more of these http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif
Diane



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