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Darlene
09-22-2000, 09:20 AM
So this is really, really bad but I thought if I put it up and explained what I was trying to do maybe someone would help. Obviously it was going so poorly that I did not finish it. The idea is a nude subtly worked into a landcape. I'd like to start again but need advice. One more note - my scanner is having serious issues at the moment so this probably looks even worse than the original. Please help!
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carly
09-22-2000, 11:12 AM
I can see what you're trying to accomplish...you certainly don't pick the easy stuff...do you? :-)

Now, the colors work well...high key for a mountain desert range...makes one feel the heat. The small areas of darker definition don't read well yet...its hard to tell what you have going on there...but if this is a more abstract piece, more definition may not matter.

The figure seems to be your main concern and in some areas she is nicely woven in from the neck to the breasts and down toward the stomach the colors work well and are suggestive enough...the problem I see is in the leg area. Over emphasis of the leg is drawing your eye directly toward it...try keeping the colors of the desert floor flowing into and thru the leg only suggesting parts of it...like the raised knee into the mountain shape (which works well too). Taking away the prominent lines in the thigh will keep the eye from 'finding' the shape so quickly.

Unique idea...I'd love to see this one when you complete it!
carly

Darlene
09-22-2000, 11:26 AM
Carly, thanks for the reply. Do you think I can save this? I'm at a loss on that leg - I know it is too obvious but I just didn't know where to go with that. Should I just start again? Maybe I should take another tact with the landscape and turn the nude into a fallen log or something......

carly
09-22-2000, 01:24 PM
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You'll see the changes I made in a photoshop program...I smudges the lines in the leg...you can do this by wetting, lifting the color, etc. I also lightened the dark area on the right side...it was creating two focal points and caused the eye to jump back and forth especially since they are on the same plane.

I cut off some of the left side and the right side so the composition would not have a stretched out look. Hope this shows on the screen!

Working on this one will teach you more than turning her into a log! :-)
carly

Darlene
09-22-2000, 04:45 PM
Carly, thanks for your help. I'll spend some time smudging and lifting. Hope I improve it.

Chickie
09-28-2000, 08:46 PM
I don't know if you intended this or not but it has a very Oriental feel to it.
I like it.