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Johan58
12-04-2016, 08:52 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/12-04-2016/1967424_wip1.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: no name yet
Year Created:
Medium: Acrylic
Surface: Canvas
Dimension: 18 x 24
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
little stream runs over a rock face.. with eroded river banks

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
any changes I need to do,, to bring to life?

~JMW~
12-04-2016, 10:53 PM
Do you have a reference image to share?
Looking down onto a scene like this one is a very tricky one to paint, getting all the angles of perspective so it looks correct..

Can you see that some of the water/rock edges appear unnatural?
If you can soften some of those edges , maybe have some slightly darker areas of deep water?
The foreground trees look very nice.

Tom Brown
12-05-2016, 07:49 AM
Yeah, a reference photo would help. I'm sorry, but the perspective is way off. I'm thinking this cannot be salvaged, but it can be redone. Never give up. Of course it is just as likely that it is me that is way off. Maybe you're not looking for a photorealistic interpretation. If you divide this into two equal pieces, right across the middle with a horizontal line, then each piece is fairly close to being correct with regards to perspective, but put 'em together and it just doesn't work. I hope this isn't too harsh, it's meant to be helpful.

picassolite
12-13-2016, 01:58 AM
YOUR QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
any changes I need to do,, to bring to life?

My comments:

I'm making a series of guesses about this image-
because I'm feeling this image is on its' way to being a poster... about drought.

1- the real story behind this image is that the water level of this stream is dropping drastically.
2- Your angle of observation is high up on a mountain ... looking down over this stream.
3- You are not so concerned with the technical issues of rendering this painting as much as
you are concerned about bringing awareness that the water level is dropping off the charts.
4- Only if my series of assumptions is correct ... do my suggestions make any sense.
5- If so ... the title has to immediately convey your intention ... ie.
No More Diving - Shallow Water!

If so ... then something like this might work ...
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/13-Dec-2016/1983103-untitled-orig-d.jpg

picassolite (https://focuspointshape.com) :angel: