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Rieko
10-26-2003, 03:37 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/10-26-2003/21540_wahine.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: La Joie
Year Created: 2003
Medium: Watercolor
Surface: Paper
Dimension: 15
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
I have lived for five years on Oahu.

"Fish and Poi , Fish and Poi,
All day long on fish and poi,
Sunset Beach to Waikiki,
I don't care for tomorrow..."

The right upper part of the grass skirt on the second girl looks cut, but it's spread out in the background which doesn't show in this photo...

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Always I have a hard time for painting the background. Is this one working? Your C&C are most welcome!

Paintonbrush
10-26-2003, 04:29 PM
I see some self confidence coming through. without the business of the background, those gals would certainly stand on their own.

jerryW
10-26-2003, 05:22 PM
it comes together
do you llke bonnard?
he is one of my faves.
I think you go that way

Naris
10-26-2003, 05:29 PM
The skin, hair and skirts are lovely. I can see the movement and feel the warm ocean breeze. I am very attracted to the lower left portion of this painting. The faces/heads are a tad masculine and seem to pull me away from where I really want to look. The belly and arm of the dancer on the left are great!

mcknight
10-26-2003, 08:00 PM
I like illusion of movement this creates. The background works for me.

Rieko
10-27-2003, 03:14 AM
Diane, thank you very much for your kudos. I can use it graciously. I rediscovered the joy of painting in this piece.

Jerry, I knew the name of Pierre Bonnard, but I must confess; I searched his paintings on the Internet... I really like his styles! I'm influenced by Cubism and Impressionistic use of colors, so I really appreciate for your comment. It's nice of you!

Narista, thank you for looking and commenting. I always appreciate good feedback like yours.
It's my intention to keep the dancer's head masculine as possible in comparison with her feminine lower bottom:D And her face is not important to me; the purpose of this painting is to lead people's eyes from her lower left body to her raising hand = La Joie (The Joy)!

Dave, thanks!!! Now I can sign it with your approval. ;)

capricorne
10-27-2003, 03:58 AM
Think the background is beautiful. I'm not sure about the cut off from the arms.
Love the warm-cool contrast and the light that is playing on the skin of the girls. The horizontal arm of the first girl is beautiful rendered.

Gilberte
10-27-2003, 06:09 AM
Hi Rieko,
That's a good painting, you've shown the motion very well and that's difficult I think when you want to render dancers. Lucky girl you are having lived there, now Paris and bientôt Lausanne. Breathe all those different cultures, absorb them, translate them in your paintings and have the experiences stocked in your pretty brain for your old age :D

Fagan
10-27-2003, 10:04 AM
Very well done! I especially like the closest girl...her skirt colors are vibrant and swirly. This shows a lot of hip action. I would like to see the eyes a little more defined. Background is just right!

Andrew
10-27-2003, 12:04 PM
The background is hinted at most satisfactorily. I agree with Narista, the masculine nature of the faces is a distraction from the very feminine body forms.


Andrew

Rieko
10-27-2003, 05:02 PM
Jan, thank you. Well, I want you to use your imagination to see the unseen part of the raising hand, LOL:D

Gilberte, thanks always for your kudos! Je vous remercie profondement. Et votre conseil est bien entendu!:evil:

Bev, I truly appreciate for your comment. I usually paint faceless; but when it's necessary, I paint faces suggestively. I may go for a bit defined on the first girl, though. :)

Andrew, thanks for looking and commenting! Nice of you.:)