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Emmee
08-02-2016, 11:47 AM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/08-02-2016/1986916_1_Early_Flowers-_EDITED.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Early Flowers
Year Created:
Medium: Oil
Surface: Wood
Dimension: 16x20
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
I painted this at the beginning of the year. I was trying to capture the early mor ning sun coming through the window, illuminating the flowers and part of the green plant. It's hard to tell from the photo, but I also tried putting in some impasto on the closest flowers. I know that the composition is not that great. I was concentrating/experimenting on the illuminated, reflected, and impasto parts. (By the way, I apologize for the reflection on the painting.)

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
What could I have done differently to make it look more like mor ning light coming in through the window? Any other helpful tips?

gebhm
08-02-2016, 02:46 PM
Overall I like this work. I am not sure if it was intended, but the potted plant in the background appears wilted to me as if it is dying. I like the softness of the image. The other thing I notice is the shadows from the single flower on the table appear way to long! In the painting they are casting a shadow the same length as the upright vase and flowers.

~JMW~
08-02-2016, 02:58 PM
It looks quite nice overall.
The branch & flower in upper left, seems to have a hard edge there where they connect or overlap, it catches my eye..
Not sure about the whole left edge?
Why it is lighter? Is it the painted around the edge of the canvas?

What color did you use for the shadows?
In the future maybe consider about a purple or blue for shadows... a compliment of the main color.
There is some technical rule/guideline for warm vs cool shadows depending on the light source I think, but I don't have it memorized..

~JMW~
08-02-2016, 03:02 PM
The areas I questioned -

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/02-Aug-2016/50585-1986916_1_Early_Flowers-_EDITED.jpg

Emmee
08-03-2016, 02:19 AM
"I am not sure if it was intended, but the potted plant in the background appears wilted to me as if it is dying. I like the softness of the image. The other thing I notice is the shadows from the single flower on the table appear way to long! In the painting they are casting a shadow the same length as the upright vase and flowers."

gebhm,
Yes, I agree that the potted plant does look a bit wilted. As for the shadows, they really were that long (I have a photo to prove it). The sun had just peeked over the horizon and made the shadows long like that. Thank you for your input!

Emmee
08-03-2016, 02:34 AM
"The branch & flower in upper left, seems to have a hard edge there where they connect or overlap, it catches my eye..
Not sure about the whole left edge?
Why it is lighter? Is it the painted around the edge of the canvas?

What color did you use for the shadows?
In the future maybe consider about a purple or blue for shadows... a compliment of the main color.
There is some technical rule/guideline for warm vs cool shadows depending on the light source I think, but I don't have it memorized.."

tj84,
Hard edge... yes! I see what you mean. You are right! It is too hard. Thank you for pointing that out.

As for the left edge, it is the inside frame (?) of the window (not sure if that is the right terminology) that the table is sitting next to. I chose not to put a lot of detail in the transition of the glare on the window to the inside frame of the window. Maybe I should have put a little more in there to help define it a little better.

The shadows on the table were a mixture of purple and brown with a little green under the vase to indicate the reflection of the stems in the vase. Hmm, I'd be interested in knowing more about that "technical rule/guideline" you mentioned. If you think of it, please share. :)

Thank you for your comments!

~JMW~
08-04-2016, 03:12 AM
found a few threads on shadows..
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Articles2/1805/264/
http://www.wetcanvas.com/forums/showthread.php?t=161326&page=1&pp=40

Emmee
08-04-2016, 12:05 PM
tj84,

Thank you for the links! Now I have some more resources to help me. Last night I started a new painting that has a lot of dappled light so these links will be of great benefit!

Tom Brown
08-04-2016, 03:52 PM
The top rim of the vase is troubling me. I think it should be something like this;http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/04-Aug-2016/1986439-image.jpeg

Emmee
08-04-2016, 08:31 PM
Tom Brown,

Even though the photo does not show it looking like this, I think you are right. This is a good example of changing what an item looks like to be more artistically pleasing.

Thanks for the tip!