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Amhahn
11-21-2015, 05:54 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/11-21-2015/1977929_image.jpeg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Elephants
Year Created:
Medium: Charcoal
Surface: Paper
Dimension: 16x13
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
This is a piece I did for my art class. I am a self taught adult finally getting some needed instruction on a lot of the basics. I think the lighting is off in my photo. The picture is on white paper, not the tan color it looks to be on.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Please comment on anything you might see wrong or needs improvement.

UnknownArtist
11-21-2015, 06:08 PM
Good start. Love charcoal work, keep pushing the dark and light. You can add graphite over charcoal to go darker.

Amhahn
11-21-2015, 11:31 PM
Thanks for the tip! Where do I need more dark?

Dana Design
11-22-2015, 12:09 PM
Would the mother elephant have more heft to her chest? It looks a bit too small.

Other than that, really good work!!

jessw
11-22-2015, 02:41 PM
Nice drawing.

The ground and sky both look a little "blotchy" to me.

You've created some nice little bushes and grasses on the ground, but there is bare space between many of these bits of foliage. This is especially noticeable around the front legs of the large elephant.

Amhahn
11-22-2015, 03:35 PM
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/22-Nov-2015/1977929-image.jpeg Thank you! I don't know what I can do about the size of the mother elephant's chest without re-doing the whole picture.

I added some foliage on the ground and messed with the tree background. The reference photo I used had the tree background similar to what I did in the picture I drew. It is not sky.

Laurelwood
11-22-2015, 04:54 PM
For some reason, this reminds me of watercolor..

I think you did an excellent job rendering the elephants, the proportion, overall texture...seems correct to me, which is half the battle, right? I agree about the darker values. I think wherever you have the darkest values now (on the elephants - not the background), you could go even darker. Keep your light values where they are, and the mid-tones darken a little bit. All so that the elephants stand out more. Darken the foreground grass, but leave the distant grass...that sort of thing. You want your elephants to have a slightly different tonal value than the background.

Amhahn
11-22-2015, 09:16 PM
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/22-Nov-2015/1977929-image.jpeg Thank you! I pushed the darks more and am pleased with the result.

Laurelwood
11-23-2015, 09:52 AM
Very nice improvement!!