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amrutza
11-10-2015, 01:27 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/11-10-2015/1977517_fall.jpg

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/11-10-2015/1977517_fly.jpg

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/11-10-2015/1977517_yoki_1.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Please critique !
Year Created:
Medium: Pen/Ink
Surface: Paper
Dimension: a4
Allow digital alterations?: No, please :)

MY COMMENTS:
My works

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Hello everyone! Please critique my work here on every aspect! with positives and negatives. I started drawing a year back. More photos here: https://goo.gl/photos/FQie4n93XVEYT7sp8

Webpage: fb.com/guzelin.art

Journeyman
11-11-2015, 03:34 AM
No Critique from me theyíre lovely drawings, some of the best Iíve seen on WC each one has something to say and to me thatís what makes a good drawing.

:thumbsup: Dave.

Rick B
11-11-2015, 10:02 AM
Great work. I agree with Dave. Are the colors done with watercolors or is that all ink?

Wassie
11-11-2015, 06:21 PM
No negative critique from me either. All I know is I like them even tho' I don't draw/paint in this style. The images speak for themselves. I like the action in the first one. I like both the others but the bottom one reminds me of me sitting at my desk with the clutter and is that laundry on the right bottom that needs to be done?

RCharleston
11-11-2015, 10:44 PM
Very nice! Fun, whimsical drawings.....great sense of motion in the first one.

I question the point at which the bottom of the last one is cropped. I think you can get away with it in something this loosely done but I wonder if the composition would be helped by the inclusion of the bottom of the furniture & baskets with a little breathing room below them.

Bodhi Peace
11-11-2015, 11:36 PM
the first two are a little mo' "exciting" but that won't stop me from saying that I enjoy all three. the last one stands in nice opposition to the more sparse and colorful nature of the first two. I'm torn about my fave, but I go with the #1.

The one I can critique is #3. More color in the laundry. Maybe a gradient to white in the upper right corner. Darker shadows in the desk cubby and under it by her feet. The way the hair is curvy outline, like bumps, hair doesn't do that. The window propped open, when I didn't look closely, I took it for a frame on the wall. Maybe if you tinted that window down, made the outside more clear. Also the right legs of the chair are a bit off. I don't know exactly what that is to the right of the window... a blank paper? a whiteboard?

Bodhi Peace
11-11-2015, 11:41 PM
I think #1 is just fine.
If you work on #2 at all, play with the background. Maybe it works best that the transition to white coincides with the back of the wing? I would go *either* more white or less white. Add dimensionality to the figure by testing with showing the other (back) leg and arm. And the other wing. A few more broken pieces attached to the wing where it is coming apart. Maybe darker shadow not only in front of her but also beneath her.

garyk
11-12-2015, 02:01 AM
Lovely drawings! In the lower I would not mind seeing stronger contrasts, shadows, and something to lead me back in further.

TerryCurley
11-12-2015, 07:12 AM
Wonderful work!

deedeedaydee
11-14-2015, 11:43 PM
Nice job.
They would perfectly suit a kids story book.