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Perry
10-15-2015, 07:51 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/10-15-2015/22627_drake2.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Drake well
Year Created:
Medium: Oil
Surface: Wood
Dimension: 9x12
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
I had to take the photo on an angle to eliminate
the glare from the lights. I was going for a more painterly approach than I usually have.
I think it came out OK but I'm not crazy about a couple of the trees.


MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
I would like feedback on the composition and color harmony but you can critique whatever you
like.

TerryCurley
10-16-2015, 08:06 AM
I've only been painting for about a year and a half and I a very long way to go, so you might want to keep that in mind while reading my critique.

The colors used are great. Your trees are slanted which I think is a good thing! in nature there isn't much that is exactly vertical. The hard wood I like a lot. You can tell it's late fall and the leaves have thinned out considerably. That's another good thing. The house itself is great, however something just isn't sitting right with me on the chimney. It seems too big for the house IMO.

Over all I think it's a very good painting.

Perry
10-16-2015, 05:22 PM
Thanks for your comments Terry.
How long you've been painting doesn't matter to me.
My wife can't paint a lick but many times she has
told me something doesn't look right on my
artwork and she was correct.
The building is and old oil well and I'm not sure
what that chimney looking thing is.

Mark Szymanski
10-18-2015, 01:29 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/10-15-2015/22627_drake2.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Drake well
Year Created:
Medium: Oil
Surface: Wood
Dimension: 9x12
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
I had to take the photo on an angle to eliminate
the glare from the lights. I was going for a more painterly approach than I usually have.
I think it came out OK but I'm not crazy about a couple of the trees.


MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
I would like feedback on the composition and color harmony but you can critique whatever you
like.

I straightened the photo for you...
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/18-Oct-2015/1765836-Untitled.jpg

Hopefully it is closer to this.

Color Harmony works because there are very few colors in here. It is basically a green painting with very little brown.

It is an extremely low key painting. You've placed shadows of great depth without placing the corresponding values in the light.

For the composition, the oil house/well is in a good spot, taking up the right half of the painting. Since the house is the subject, it is in a good location to attract the attention. The leading line of the path is laid out so it seemingly crosses the midline, even though it doesn't. There is a smaller pine in the foreground to help balance the mass of the house... I think perhaps it is a bit too massive for this job though.

There are many unfortunate lines in the painting.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/18-Oct-2015/1765836-red_lines_leading_out_of_the_painting.jpg

The worst offenders are these trees pointing antagonistically away from your subject rather than being neutral or better yet adding to the subject. The small pine in the foreground especially should be supporting your subject rather than leaning away since it is the balance for what is in the background. It would have been better to thin it out here and there and have it at least a neutral growth upward than to drag it away to the left. Letting some of the ground behind it be seen would have lent some airiness to this area. Same goes for the big deciduous tree... (maple?). It leans away from your subject a great deal and has a very large trunk diameter. The trunk is larger than your door even though it is farther away. It is truly a massive tree. Perhaps designing some of the branches in the canopy to help draw the eye around rather than just placing branches on a trunk. The right hand pine is really a problem because it angles straight out of the painting. It should draw you back around into the painting to help give the eye a path back into it. A neutral tree, a twist in the trunk, any design but what is here.

There are a few other smaller design issues, mostly with tangents near the roof.
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/18-Oct-2015/1765836-Pink_unfortunate_lines.jpg
The pink lines show the intersections of several lines. These are powerful draws for the eye up and away from the subject. Admittedly it is a smaller issue, but one easily fixed.

If I change this to a black and white...

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/18-Oct-2015/1765836-Black_and_white.jpg

You can see how even though there are color changes, the is little value change. Brightening some areas will help to give the idea of sunshine, or conversely, if you lighten some of the shadows, you could have an overcast gloomy day.

Something to think about, is the design of the path. It is perfectly level all the way to the house. If we were to change that, you could have a more interesting design...

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/18-Oct-2015/1765836-topography.jpg

There could be a small hill obscuring some of the path.

Regardless, maybe thinking about how the planes on the foreground interact with the light. If one thinks of the topography of the land, like they lay large cardboard discs on the ground it will simplify the shapes. Each disc will catch the light differently according to the angle of the disc of the light.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/18-Oct-2015/1765836-topography_elipses.jpg

This approach works well when using a painterly approach, since each brush stroke is defining a different area. The value and color changes can be quite dramatic with this idea in mind. This same idea, what angle is the roof to the light, what angle is the chimney structure to the light helps to define these areas better as well.

Perry
10-18-2015, 07:58 PM
Mark Szymanski, Thank you very much for the time you spent making
your comments and visual aids. The things that you are suggesting make sense.
There is so much to fix on this piece I will probably just do another
one.
Much appreciated!