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08-18-2015, 05:03 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/08-18-2015/1890042_preview3.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Simple still life
Year Created:
Medium: Pen/Ink
Surface: Paper
Dimension: 42cm x 29,7cm or 16,5"x11,7"
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
simple still life painted with indian ink and reed pen(?)

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
What is your opinion?

La_
08-19-2015, 12:17 AM
i would go into a little bit more detail by putting in some carefully placed darks in the left grouping. i really like the dark strip of background horizon, balance its strength with a few more details the front and yeah, lovely monochrome piece

oh, that top centre stripe, what is that? can you soften it a whole bunch?

la

lunchbox
08-20-2015, 04:54 PM
The fruits have a wonderful shimmer of light. I think the bowl is in front of a window with strong light? If so, I'm not sure I am seeing shadow from the bowl or the base of the bowl? Best to avoid centering your focal point in the middle when you can. A few fallen grapes would help move the eye around a bit. Would love to see this in watercolors :)

it'sALLart
08-25-2015, 08:11 AM
Centered composition = static, no flow to the design. The center "stripe" behind the bowl even adds to this effect. Simple cropping of the image could help and an additional piece of fruit on the table leads the eye around a bit more. Otherwise, nicely rendered in a difficult-to-handle medium. :)