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GirlArtDork
08-18-2015, 01:54 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/08-18-2015/1972585_20150818_101813_resized_(298x300).jpg

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/08-18-2015/1972585_20150818_101813_resized.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Local Chapel
Year Created:
Medium: Acrylic
Surface: Canvas
Dimension: 37
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
Ugh, I need to have this piece done by tomorrow, and I've done it several different ways, and am still not happy with it. I don't want it to look overly realistic, but rather more like an "art" piece. I'll show you the first way I did it, and then I messed up up totally, and then ended up here-- 2nd image with color blocking. AND am still not happy.
This is a local place that is well known around here, so I can't totally change it. But I want it to be something someone would be proud to display.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Anything that would be fairly easy that I could get done by tomorrow. :( I should have asked earlier.

GirlArtDork
08-18-2015, 01:55 PM
Well anyway, I think i messed that posting up. Didn't have the first way I did it. but the picture is what I have now.

Bevahlee
08-18-2015, 09:38 PM
I like this a lot, but the outline makes it look pasted on. The evergreen is outlined too. It's good to make a very delicate line that disappears when you apply the paint. Maybe this will help some

La_
08-19-2015, 12:10 AM
i kind of like the outlining, but i am jarred by the very strong difference between it and the background.
softening the outlining lessens that, but i think getting more detail in the background might also work to bring the two styles together better.

la

GirlArtDork
08-19-2015, 10:30 AM
Here's how it was before.
But to me this was boring and not artsy enough.

GirlArtDork
08-19-2015, 11:15 PM
Okay, I made some bigger changes, and hope this is better.

GirlArtDork
08-20-2015, 01:29 PM
Calling it done. I think I toned down a some of the black lines, brightened up the background to bring it more in balance.

garyk
08-21-2015, 02:28 AM
I think it works better. I did not like the first version you posted. I think the outlines could be more muted. I notice the same thing in some of Van Gogh's paintings. Also the wall edge on the left side lines up with the building edge, which I think is less effective than if you moved the wall edge towards the center a bit.

GirlArtDork
08-21-2015, 01:31 PM
Gary, thank you. I went ahead ahead and muted the outlines even more, and it really did help. I didn't have time to redo the whole wall edge, but I added a few brighter colors. I went ahead and delivered it this morning, and the recipient was quite pleased.
Thank you everyone who gave me input! Another's point of view is always helpful!

Josephcow
08-23-2015, 11:11 PM
I like it a lot. But the last picture you posted looks pretty muted. I miss the high saturation blue on the shadow of the building. could just be the picture though!

GirlArtDork
08-24-2015, 11:35 AM
yes, actually it was pretty muted. Here's a better pic. I never took one after the final tweakings, but this is close to finished.