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Tevriala
08-18-2015, 10:23 AM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/08-18-2015/1972181_DSC_2437_-_Copy.JPG

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/08-18-2015/1972181_DSC_2443.JPG


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Tomato
Year Created:
Medium: Oil
Surface: Canvas
Dimension: 10-12 inch
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
I would like a comprehensive critique
Тhere are still details to be bringing, but I want to hear criticism before I finish painting

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
searching critique of the whole picture

Mark Szymanski
08-18-2015, 05:15 PM
Tomatoes look very tomato-ee well done on the shapes of the tomatoes. I like the variety of shapes of tomatoes and colors of the tomatoes... they don't seem to be off the same variety of tomato, one seems to be an heirloom variety. I like that.

Other items are in process, so I won't speak too much about that.

The thing which struck me right off as not being quite correct is the bowl. When I look at the top of the bowl, the ellipse seems to not be equal, and the arc along the front doesn't show as a round circle seen on edge.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/18-Aug-2015/1765836-bowl_opening.jpg

Another problem I notice is the center of the bowl varies from top to bottom. If I draw lines straight down from the edges of the ellipse, and then make an "X" I get the centerline of the ellipse. Transferred down, the bottom of the bowl isn't centered under the top of the bowl.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/18-Aug-2015/1765836-bowl_center.jpg

Also, since the horizon line is above the bowl (since you can see into the top of it, the bowl is below eye level) the bottom arc of the bottom of the bowl will be deeper than the arc at the top of the bowl. This is because the bottom arc is farther away from the horizon line.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/18-Aug-2015/1765836-bowl_bottom.jpg

This will help to sit the bowl onto the the table.

I worry about the right most tomato being so close to the edge. I notice in the picture of the canvas on the easel, it is going to be butt up to the edge of the frame when you get it framed. Probably not something you want.

All of the ancillary items are grouped at the same level. These items are acting to my eye as a bit of a barrier to allowing you into the painting. They stop the eye from traveling upwards and inwards into the painting. Having something to ease the transition past the items will help some.

This is still very early in the painting, but I worry about the thrust of the composition. There isn't much depth of plane here. There are numerous items clustered at the same depth within the painting. The other issue to me is the path through the painting. The first thing to try for is to give the eye a area to go to as soon as you see the painting. After that, think about what you want the person viewing the painting to look at next, then next, and so on. Then think how you want the person to exit the painting. Composing the path is rather important in still life's since you are trying to communicate something about the objects... which are the most important, and which are supporting those important things.

I look forward to seeing what you do with this.

Tevriala
08-18-2015, 11:58 PM
thanks, this will be a great help
indeed there are many objects piled up and distracted eye
I will bring the shadow and will appear depth
Thank you

Tevriala
08-19-2015, 06:03 AM
I changed the background
Give volume of the bowl, but I'm not sure I fixed ellipses

The photo is very bad

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/19-Aug-2015/1972181-DSC_2464.JPG

Tevriala
08-19-2015, 10:13 AM
I worked over the bowl again
I think it's a little better

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/19-Aug-2015/1972181-DSC_2467.jpg

lunchbox
08-20-2015, 04:47 PM
This is looking good. Mark has given you some excellent advice, which you have interpreted very well. On my computer I'm seeing black used for the shadows and the crease in the front tomato. This might not be the case in the actual painting. But do have some fun mixing complimentary colors to create depth and shadows. Additionally a glaze of alizarin crimson helps to deepen the shadows of red quite nicely.