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xislandman
07-07-2015, 11:04 AM
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/07-Jul-2015/1145169-dennis-self.JPG

11 X 14 oil on canvas panel

AppalachianArt
07-07-2015, 11:39 AM
Nice job! I like how you brought the background into your right shoulder. I think if you repeated that on the other side a little, it would look more cohesive on the bottom. Great drawing and color!

cordobesa
07-07-2015, 02:00 PM
Very nice! I like the glow on the skin.

Bevahlee
07-07-2015, 02:06 PM
very nice job. However I disagree about the left shoulder. The right shoulder is just right, like Sargent would have done, but he would have brought the dark of the background up into the face on the right(your left shoulder), but that's nit picky. It's a good job

xislandman
07-07-2015, 03:10 PM
Appalachian, cordobesa and Bev... thanks for such positive comments. There were a lot of over paints getting to the final result. And Bev... I looked at your enormous body of work and was very impressed. It is not my style but if I had a fabulous entry I could see this one hanging...

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/07-Jul-2015/1145169-3510512450_f8ec9669ae_z.jpg

Bevahlee
07-07-2015, 03:26 PM
ah well you certainly did look thru my work to find that piece.

here's another batch. lol

http://s189.photobucket.com/

londonA1
07-07-2015, 08:49 PM
Hi Dennis.

When I use my hand to cover the hair in your portrait it looks pretty much perfect. Unfortunately the hair doesn't have a unified value with the area of the temple and the forehead, which results in a strange illusion that you're wearing a crash helmet!

Fear not! Go online and take a look at any of the hundreds of portraits in oil by John Singer-Sargent. Sargent's advice was to constantly walk away from the canvas after each application of value, rather than obsess over detail. The problem many painters have with hair is caused by overly detailed brush strokes rather than focusing on the correct values from the outset. The simplest way to see value problems is to stand back and (no joke) squint when you look at your painting - the reduced vision allows you to clearly see value errors.

The other problem I can see is the area brow. It's far too monotone. Again, squint and you will see it.

Best,

David.

xislandman
07-08-2015, 08:56 AM
David... I took your comment on the hair and 'fluffed' it out a bit. My hair is thinning and lays pretty flat to my head but I think this is more accurate...

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/08-Jul-2015/1145169-dennis-self.JPG