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Upnorth88
07-01-2015, 01:18 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/07-01-2015/1971791_IMG_2996.JPG

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/07-01-2015/1971791_IMG_2788.jpg

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/07-01-2015/1971791_IMG_2745.JPG


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Picnic Point
Year Created:
Medium: Acrylic
Surface: Canvas
Dimension: 20 x 16
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
I have repainted this canvas over quite a few times. I've attached just three pics starting with the most recent

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
I am wondering about the sky and the blues. Should they be closer in colour?

When I made the tree larger it's now cut off at the top. Is this a no no?

I am a novice painter and would like any suggestions and comments. I found the tree very challenging.

Thanks in advance

Mark Szymanski
07-01-2015, 08:03 PM
Trees can be very daunting indeed. A single tree can be quite troublesome since it is a portrait of a living thing, so in your painting you have created a portrait of a tree, with a bit of ground surrounding it, much as if you had painted a person in the out of doors.

In this case, I think you could use a bit more work on the leaves, actually perhaps less work on the leaves would be more precise. In your painting you've attempted to describe every single leaf as an individual. Yet when we see a tree, we see the leaves as a mass shape rather than collection of individual pieces.

Perhaps thinking of a different shape of the leaf mass will give a more life like appearance as well. Because a circle never changes shape and never varies in the angle of the line - in other words it has the exact same shape no matter where you look, a circle doesn't describe something as being alive very well. By changing the shape of the leaf masses, you could bring that variety of shape which by its very nature, variety implies life.

Instead of one massive trunk, maybe add some variety to the actual shape of the trunk. You could also split the trunk into to or three, and make each trunk a different shape.

Also consider the shape of the shadows both on the tree and on the ground. By thinking about the masses of shadow, you also describe the light, both its intensity and direction.

I don't think the blue is such a problem, nor do I think the tree growing out of the top of the picture is a problem. Both are common in quality paintings.

Just to show what one possibility with your painting might be using the above I quickly sketched out below... it's rough, but maybe has some ideas...

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/01-Jul-2015/1765836-Tree_Idea.jpg

I think it is great you keep hammering away at the painting, many different iterations of the same idea. Shows a lot of grit, and that is something many folks don't have! Keep up the good work.

Upnorth88
07-02-2015, 05:34 PM
Thank you so much Mark and thank you for your alteration. Seeing what you've done encourages me and I will continue to work on it and repost. :)