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cliff.kachinske
04-21-2015, 01:14 PM
Thank you for looking in. I hope this pleases. If not I will be happy to receive your critique.

16 X 20, canvas, my own foto.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/21-Apr-2015/1965263-View-down-river.jpg

Sorry if I created any confusion by changing the thread title. I needed to adjust the photo of the painting.

TamiP
04-21-2015, 01:16 PM
Very, very nice.

Fox_eNova
04-21-2015, 04:12 PM
I feel the dock boards need to have straighter edges in contrasting shape with the ripples in the water. The water and dock look the same to me, just different colors.
my Q&D rendering
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/21-Apr-2015/1714334-dock.jpg

Charlie's Mum
04-21-2015, 05:18 PM
I agree with Eric that the dock needs greater definition and it could have more detail in the foreground planks.
That rather large clump of dark green (;);)) - the wood/forest, need to be made lighter too - it's a bit too strong for that distance - comes forward too much Cliff.:)
I do like the water!
The bare tress could have some light and shade to give them form.:)

mellybean
04-21-2015, 06:55 PM
Love the ripples on the water!

Dcam
04-21-2015, 09:03 PM
This is a nice painting and you have some good advice so far. The trees on the right could use a bit of value change here and there.
Derek

jocko500
04-21-2015, 11:47 PM
lot of good advice been given. Very good subject

cliff.kachinske
04-22-2015, 10:54 AM
Tami, Melly, glad you like the painting.

Eric, Maureen, Derek thank you for the feedback. I've made some changes already and I'm waiting for the color shift to settle down before doing any more.

I'm using much more fluid acrylics now and the degree of color shift is a bit of a surprise.

cem
04-22-2015, 02:22 PM
Good advice from everyone. Looking forward to seeing the revisions.

ColinS
04-22-2015, 10:40 PM
Nicely done and the advice from the others would be helpful.

cliff.kachinske
04-22-2015, 11:11 PM
Colin, Cindy, thanks for checking in.

~JMW~
04-22-2015, 11:28 PM
You have a lot of generic blue sky, why not add some more clouds or expand those bright clouds /colors like you have near the hill?

The dock almost looks too large for the overall river size and the distances? :confused:

Is there a part of the scene that you really want to stand out , the sky, the water, the dock etc ? If you have a ref image of the scene really study it to see shapes, sizes , angles, distance...

Fox_eNova
04-23-2015, 02:38 PM
TJ: I am a life-long boater (http://eharder.com/Nova%20II/nova_0532.jpg) and from my experience, let me say that there are no docks too big, most are too small..:envy: :lol:

cliff.kachinske
04-23-2015, 03:11 PM
TJ: I am a life-long boater (http://eharder.com/Nova%20II/nova_0532.jpg) and from my experience, let me say that there are no docks too big, most are too small..:envy: :lol:

Funny you should mention that. The dock in question belongs to a rowing club and the part I show can handle two single sculls. It's a big honker and I've actually truncated it.

There is a problem, but it's not the size of the dock. Maureen pointed it out when she mentioned the far bank comes forward too much. The near bank is too close also, but that's an easy fix.

cliff.kachinske
04-23-2015, 03:18 PM
tj, about that sky ... it needs some movement to bring your eye back down toward the water. I had planned to add it but somehow did not. Ooops.

Just to the left of the dock's vanishing point is a little patch of white water. Just about everything in the painting (except the clouds, as noted above) points toward it or points to something that does. Maybe I'll put some red rocks there.