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cem
09-29-2014, 03:24 PM
Would love to get some feedback on this before I call it finished. 9x12 wc paper, various brands of acrylics. Sorry for the poor quality of picture.816591 Reference photo from Unsplash.

Imogene Thomas
09-29-2014, 05:20 PM
I like the softness of the colors. The suprise of the greenery in the surrounding bushes. I just have to wonder if the "center" is a good place for the boat? Let's see what others will think..

gaykir
09-29-2014, 05:32 PM
Really nicely done. I too wish it were off center.

asmith38
09-29-2014, 07:51 PM
That is an unusual angle, but I like it!

ArtMusicFilm
09-29-2014, 10:12 PM
Very nice! :-)

ColinS
09-30-2014, 12:50 AM
It's a very interesting image and you've done a great job on it Cindy.

I wonder if you can delineate the distinction between the colour of the water and the edge of the boat- they seem to blend together at least in the photo.

But really it's very good.

~JMW~
09-30-2014, 01:08 AM
It isn't reading as a long canoe to me , more like a row boat, maybe the width of it is making me think that..
I'd add more color to the water also.. a bit more detailing.
I like the bushes and the boat, it could be a generic kind of boat..

cem
09-30-2014, 01:23 AM
All good advice! Unfortunately I don't think there is anything I can do about the composition. The ref. photo is that way and I fell in love with it. I just didn't think about the boat being smack in the middle until it was too late. I can, however, give the water a little more color. The ref. pic is sun washed, lots of glare. I was unable to give it the same glow. Made some other changes from the ref, i.e. boat color (yellow), and color of bushes. Any suggestions on how to adjust the comp?
So far the family members that have seen it love it, especially my 24yr.old grandson. I think he is my biggest fan anyway:) Thanks to all for looking and commenting. I will post again when I make adjustments.

Charlie's Mum
09-30-2014, 07:20 AM
Cindy, while I agree with the comments above and knowing you cannot alter the comp at this stage, I'd suggest you could give an impression of a longer canoe shape by -
Making the front a stronger blueish colour (blue tends to recede and warm colours come forward)

Making the interior back (a warm brown coming forward!:lol:) a lighter, cooler colour - lighter as it recedes.

You could also make the comp less symmetrical-looking by adding some taller grass-like stems to one side perhaps, to break the foliage line and join water to foreground.

I can see, though, why others like it - there's more 'right' with it than 'wrong'!
And remember, it's your painting, if you like it that way then don't alter!:)

purplepansey
09-30-2014, 09:38 AM
Nice one but I agree about adding more color to the water and downplay the greenery on either side of it.

cem
09-30-2014, 05:36 PM
Made some of the changes. Better or worse or...? Still wet. 816635Thanks for looking again.

ColinS
09-30-2014, 11:20 PM
Great changes. I like the grass you added on the left. It's a striking image. :thumbsup:

cem
10-01-2014, 12:01 AM
Thank you Colin!

inkslinger69
10-01-2014, 12:26 AM
Cindy, your changes were just what your painting needed. I think you've nailed it! Great job!

cem
10-01-2014, 08:15 AM
Thanks, Tim!

LavenderFrost
10-01-2014, 12:55 PM
Nicely done!

susme48
10-02-2014, 07:19 PM
Between the grasses and the paddle, I think you escape the center problem! Nicely done!!

Fox_eNova
10-03-2014, 05:01 AM
Aye! That's it looks great! Well done!