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03-05-2014, 04:37 AM
03-05-2014, 09:51 AM
Well done certainly but this one disturbs me a bit. With the three subjects so equally spaced, my eye keeps jumping around and doesn't know where to stop. I'd be temped to eliminate the gondolas on the lower left. Love that sky!
03-05-2014, 09:59 AM
Great interest and color and I love how the rising sun shines through the sail.
03-05-2014, 12:31 PM
I love the sky too and the colours as well as the crisp brushstrokes. It is a super painting. I tend to agree with Gayle that removing the two gondolas on the left would make it even better.
03-05-2014, 12:37 PM
Very nice, great colours in the water.
I know its a bit busy but its been painted by "everyone" with just the island buildings and the gondolas and I thought I'd jazz it up a bit with a traditional fishing boat.
doctoring in arts
03-05-2014, 01:53 PM
03-05-2014, 05:21 PM
I know it's 'busy' but it's busy all over, comp and painting style, so I think it hangs together OK!
My first reaction was how the added boat seems to join two worlds - past and present!
03-05-2014, 07:46 PM
It looks like you paint effortlessly. Well done! :thumbsup:
Re: venetian Dawn
It looks like you paint effortlessly. Well done!
Ha Ha , that's the beauty of Acrylics ,if you saw all the many corrections I do over the weeks when painting you would hardly call my stuff effortless. I just keep plodding away until I cant stand messing with them and they're what I consider to be passable. I often make digital corrections of the originals when I come to print them.
03-05-2014, 11:22 PM
I don't see a composition that makes the eyes jump around. I see a strong pyramidal composition that stabilizes perception after a brief glancing about to see what is going on. An atmospheric and lyrical delight!
Thanks for all the positives and "negatives " I tend to paint to suit myself and If I break comp rules along the way --so be it. I do appreciate the " busy " comments but how would one differentiate this effort at the lagoon from all the other greater examples without the boat?
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