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arl
02-27-2014, 06:37 AM
I did this with Corel Painter 12 and Intuos 5. I used mainly oil and acrylic brushes wet into wet. I used Oil glaze brush on form and cast shadows. All comments and help are welcome. Thanks.
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/27-Feb-2014/114108-Hockey_Against_the_Boards_jpg_adj.jpg

tarakat
02-27-2014, 12:28 PM
All of your edges are very soft. Think about varying your edges. Look at your reference and find where the shadows are hard edged and duplicate the shapes. To do this, vary your brush size more. Your figures could use more contrast(especially the one closest to the viewer) and details so they are differentiated more from the background. Try turning the image to grayscale and see where the contrast could be pushed. I often start my images in black and white first so that the color information doesn't get in the way. The human eye responds to contrast and form first, color is the icing on the cake.

arl
02-28-2014, 06:32 AM
Thank you for your helpful advice.

arl
02-28-2014, 10:23 AM
I made some changes based on Tara's helpful reply. Your comments are appreciated. Thanks.
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/28-Feb-2014/114108-Hockey_Against_the_Boards_jpg_adj.jpg

Leslie F.
03-01-2014, 11:50 PM
I like your changes, Arlene. Better contrast and definition, but still loose and active!

arl
03-02-2014, 05:18 AM
Thank you Leslie. I've also been concerned about the overall composition and whether I pushed the referee to far in the background.

Leslie F.
03-02-2014, 12:53 PM
I don't think the referee is too far in the background. The composition might have benefitted if he were further to the left of the middle figure. Entrances and exits, less straight-line line of sight....However, that might not have been realistic for the situation you've painted. I'm not a follower of hockey, so I don't know.

Your foreshortening, by the way, is excellent!

arl
03-03-2014, 05:45 AM
Thank you Leslie.