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persim
09-16-2003, 01:17 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/09-16-2003/26950_me01.jpg

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/09-16-2003/26950_me02.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Selfportrait finally finished
Year Created: 2003
Medium: Oil
Surface: Canvas
Dimension: 50x70cm
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
For myself I'm finished with this one.
This is the way I want to make portraits.
It is difficult to make all the portrait like this
one but I have started with a new one.


MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Anything to say, should I NOT be satisfied??
If you have something to add please let me
know Im a learner.

Ginette
09-16-2003, 01:44 PM
This is definitely unique in its perspective.
Very daring.
I think it's overall good. I like the mouth area, pretty good job on the neck/shoulder area too.

What seems very off to me are the ears, especially the right one (his left)

I don't know what this perspective would do to the perception of where the ears are, but it "seems" off.

Anyone an expert in that sort of thing... I can't wait to hear from you.

Ginette

designditz
09-16-2003, 02:49 PM
You could make an interesting living on venice beach doing portraits at wacky angles :)... I like this alot.. kinda hard to tell on the ears.. looking at the close up they look about where they should be.. such an odd angle...tried looking in the mirror...duh! :)
I think its painted very well , great hair.. eyes look a tad cocked but what the heck... really cool stuff!

persim
09-16-2003, 04:35 PM
Ginette:
Thanks for your reply, the ear is actually where it is painted, I may
do something about the shades around the ear?

designditz:
Actually I took several pictures of me in "strange" perspective and
felt for this one.

I have attach the photo of me in this pose

giniaad
09-16-2003, 05:05 PM
over all really great!

I remember thinking the same
about the ear
last time you posted this

good to see the reference.
on the ear
if you shade it better
(following the folds of the ear)
I think it will fall into place

one thing
(that really does not need to be fixed)
is the lower lip
as it is
it looks like you are pulling your lip in
(over your teeth, a bit)
in the reference
your lip is resting outward
(shading below the lip and a little reworking will fix that
if you want to)

your left collar bone (our right)
looks too curved...tweek the lighting and shading
that will straighten it out

only one other thing
your left eye...needs more structure underneith it
(looks a bit sunken)

(I hope I did not overwhelm you...take it or leave it)

the pose, skintones and hair are great!...
I honestly like it!

persim
09-16-2003, 05:49 PM
giniaad:
Again thanks for your reply!

This critics is good I'm looking at my painting evaluating your comments and then decide what to do.

Again your reply makes me think, and this is what's it all about.

-This is some translation of a part of a poem
difficult to translate it to english:

The satisfied day is not the best,
The day with thirst is though the best,

jerryW
09-16-2003, 06:09 PM
the curtain would have connected to the top edge but I agree with the black
all the correnspondence withthe source is excellent.

artbabe21
09-17-2003, 01:27 AM
I am still wondering what you are looking at...it makes me SO curious...but it's different poses... so hey...ok

great job on this!