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ramar
03-20-2013, 07:56 AM
Hello,

This is a portrait of my oldest daughter. I would like to help me with your C&C!!!

Fabriano paper, 35x50 cm. Faber Castell Polychromos & Faber Castell PITT pencils.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/20-Mar-2013/150436-1p.jpg http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/20-Mar-2013/150436-2p.jpg
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/20-Mar-2013/150436-3p.jpg http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/20-Mar-2013/150436-4p.jpg

Thanks!

LLKrueger
03-20-2013, 11:34 AM
Ramon,

I really like your skin tones and the way you have done the hair and you are capturing a precious moment. I have three suggestions you may want to try:
1 - You have a dark outline on the edge of the eyelid closest to the eye itself. If you check your own eye, you'll see that this area is really a pinkish red.
2 - You still have some dark lines in the ears and neck which are catching my eye. I suggest you soften the edges and lighten them.
3 - Photos are known for making darks too dark. You may want to reconsider the dark color inside her mouth. If you were to see her in person with her mouth open like this, you would actually see her tongue. If you lighten and warm up this area, you may be able to give an impression of her tongue.

You have made great progress, and the good news is that pastel is very correctable. I'm very confident that you'll be able to produce an outstanding portrait of your daughter. Best wishes!

Linda

ramar
03-20-2013, 01:12 PM
Thanks for your help, Linda!!! I try to apply your tips!!!

Moises Menendez
03-20-2013, 06:48 PM
Great work mi amigo!
Watch her forehead. Babies usually have larger foreheads when compared with their faces. The problem may be the foreshortening and the photograph, I guess.

pastel lover
03-21-2013, 02:07 AM
Hello Ramon,

Very nice painting and a very difficult pose to be sure (but, oh so cute). I agree with everything Linda said plus I would add a couple of things. First, babies generally have short upper lips, you might want to recheck your reference. Also the ears don't seem to be the same size or maybe they are not in the same place, again you might want to take a look at your reference.
Overall this is looking very good. Keep it up.

Tanja

ramar
03-21-2013, 06:52 AM
Thanks, Moises and Tanja for your help!! I think that the portrait is ended but I check the ears in my reference!!! and yes!!! it's a very difficult pose!!! :)

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/21-Mar-2013/150436-5p.jpg

Katiepea
03-23-2013, 05:11 AM
Her surprised expression makes me smile. She looks like she is an absolute cutie!

LLKrueger
03-23-2013, 02:26 PM
You've finished this up really well. I love the wide-eyed expression; you've captured it exactly. Good job!

Linda

ramar
03-27-2013, 06:31 AM
Thanks, Kate and Linda!!!

It was his first studio photo and was very surprised when the flash was fired! :lol: