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Thom Byrd
09-07-2003, 02:27 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/09-07-2003/6087_j.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: jazz singe
Year Created: 2003
Medium: Colored Pencil
Surface: Paper
Dimension: 6X6
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
waking up the links between the eyes and the hand {*~*}

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
are the links asleep or dead?

pero lane
09-07-2003, 02:51 PM
Unless you meant to make the face the absolute focus...the rest seems "not done" in comparison. Overall well executed.:)

giniaad
09-07-2003, 03:17 PM
to improve...
more contrast overall
top of head seems a touch too flat
and where the hair meets the forehead
is too clean a line
there would also be more light on her chest

overall
a pretty young woman
keep at it...links not dead...starting to wake nicely

Paintonbrush
09-08-2003, 01:37 AM
I agree, needs a bit more contrast.
perfect job with the lips eyes and nose.
well done!

Ginette
09-08-2003, 01:56 AM
If I had to say what bothers me, it would be the chin sticking out so close to the edge of the page and the lips being so close to the edge too.
It makes the composition kinda left heavy and the right side seems not to belong.

Maybe if you darkened her hair in the way you darkened the left background, just make the hair a value or two darker. What do you think?

Ginette

Thom Byrd
09-08-2003, 11:33 PM
Here it is after following some suggestions that you guys gave me
thanks
thom:cat:

giniaad
09-09-2003, 09:33 AM
much improved

the end of the nose
needs to be caught up
with the rest...

then it is time to go on to the next.

cheers!

Paintonbrush
09-09-2003, 10:03 AM
NIce follow up....what a dramatic change....:clap:

Ginette
09-09-2003, 03:28 PM
I think it's much improved.
I agree with Gin

Ginette

Phranque
09-09-2003, 08:27 PM
She is lovely. Those lips are amazing, begging to be parten in song or a kiss.

roberj
09-09-2003, 10:03 PM
I got here too late again. Nice changes, she is lovely.


Bob