View Full Version : birds, lemons, sticks

02-01-2013, 06:03 PM
12 x 36 oils on stretched ...
a little 'cutesy' for me ... question is whether or not the birds work as hidden agenda items ... am considering making them more noticeable, maybe chicka dees, but am rather fond of the subdued notion ...

detail of birds:
(image is over sharpened for clarity, the odd 'ribbing' is not actually there)

another couple pieces of late, 2, 8x8 inch oils on stretched ...


and sticks ... (it's a little sharper in reality)

c&c welcomed!



Katie Black
02-01-2013, 06:34 PM
All very nice La, but the first is delightful, I do like the fact that the birds are a nice surprise, not easily noticeable, however I think you could make them stand out just a tiny bit more...what I particularly like is the subtle "dot" markings on the close up of the bird..maybe this would work on all of them.....a sure seller in my view!

02-01-2013, 11:41 PM
How do I rotate your images? #1 #2 and #4 are all side on and need to be rotated left.

02-02-2013, 12:59 PM
thanks Katie, the dots are finger prints and i kind of like them too - two turned into many and they're like little moisture glow spots ... will look at adding some subtle colors to the birds = )

dg, giggle, they're suppose to be horizontal branches, something a bit different as i tire of the 'normal' vertical versions of trees ... i suppose anyone could hang it any way they wanted tho, once it was theirs ; )


02-09-2013, 01:23 PM
Don't change the birds, they're very special now and making them noticable could turn your special painting into a common one.:)
Like your approach of painting.

02-11-2013, 10:15 AM
Birds are grat as they are. Very intreeging/interesting piece. Like the idea of birds being hiden agenda item - and strings between them. Arnie

02-21-2013, 05:07 AM
I guess you have to decide what your painting is about.
You can leave it as is. It is successful now.
If you wanted to model the birds with more rendering and contrast it will bring them out a bit and make the painting "about the birds". You could also render the branches with highlights and shadows, which would make it "about the tree". The rainbow colors gives it kind of a saltwater taffy effect to me, which is charming. The lines of the branches at the top tend toward a bit too much parallelism for me.

I like the lemons as-is.

The sticks one makes me think you snapped the photo AFTER the bird flew away. Nice composition with the lines, but it needs a focal point. You could do that with light, or sharp/blurry contrast. You could also managed your lights and darks better so the atmospheric perspective would work better. The way it is now, the distant branches come forward, and the near ones go back.