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11-28-2012, 08:37 AM
For lots of reasons haven’t posted anything for a while so thought I post this before going back to finish off my last post.
Trying to do something allegorical with this one – still needs a lot of work.
Oil on canvas 30x20. All comments appreciated. Thanks Arnie:)

11-28-2012, 05:14 PM
:) I love the light in that painting.My only concern is that to me the river nearest the viewer looks as if it is on a slight slope from the rocks on the left to the middle right of the painting.
That may just be me but it is a lovely painting.

11-29-2012, 04:22 AM
Lovely! I kind-of hate to suggest or say anything negative as you did such a wonderful job. But --- my eye keeps jumping from the bird to the white portion of the stream at the far right. I think you have to decide what you want as the most important. I do agree that you need to level the river.

11-29-2012, 07:58 AM
Thanks Trumper - going to have to watch that water.
Thanks Jan - Photos exagerrated the white and this area needs more work, but I do want to keep some tension between these two areas.

11-29-2012, 09:38 AM
Lovely painting Arnie. Water and levels look OK to me. Not sure about the bird.........


11-29-2012, 10:03 AM
That was MY first thought--love the light! Not only from the sky to the right, but on the leaves and bit of grass on the left. I agree about the bank, but would also suggest that the grass on the very left is causing at least part of the problem, being pretty much the same color. It not only leans down into the curve of the bank but seems to define it.
Is that string and stick a trap or snare for the bird--over there on the dark side?

11-29-2012, 03:44 PM
I really like the general composition and use of colours. I'm not convinced by the bird and the trees on the right - the rest is done more painterly but these two parts are done more draughtsmanlike. For me, that stops the illusion you trying to create. I think you need to take some of the detail out of the bird (which would provide movement - you can only see details in a bird when they're not moving). Nice painting, though.

12-12-2012, 10:22 AM
Thanks Ella and Jonny. THe stick is something hanging on a tree. Hopefully the dove will blend in better when its all done.
Still got more to do, but almost there on this one now. Bit of glare on tree trunks on right. Arnie

01-11-2013, 01:45 PM
A new year - getting back to painting now. Some more work on this one, but think its almost done - more work on leaves and tree trunks. Still problems with glare in photo on right. Arnie

01-11-2013, 02:11 PM
I really enjoy this. It reminds me of Rousseau's paintings in a lot of ways. Thanks for posting your progress :)


01-11-2013, 03:47 PM
Looks lovely


01-12-2013, 10:34 PM
Hi Arnie! Another Arnie delight!!!! I absolutely love this one! You have captured a lovely mood in this scene and have captured the light beautifully. I only have one itsy bitsy nit pick, and it is only my opinion, I would like to see a little variation in the curve of the light riverbank in the very middle of the painting. It is a strong light curve and I keep getting drawn to that light curve. Maybe just some mini inlets or breaks with a little darker variation. Again, just my opinion. I love it. Cheers =)) Debs.

01-13-2013, 11:42 AM
Thanks for you comments.
Painterlight: The Rousseau link is interesting - I see similarity with the figure lanscape portrate painting he advocated - are you thinking of his jungle work?
Debs: thanks and great to hear that youve recovered enough to start posting/painting:) . I find doing a little toutch up to a painting is good for breaking the ice to get one thru that invisible mental barrier.
Yes the bank needs more work - started putting some tree branches down into water but still got more to do there.
I'm going to put some retoutching varnish on it when it drys - its impossible to see what ones painting at the moment.

Octopus Inc.
01-13-2013, 03:53 PM
Well done, Beautiful...

01-21-2013, 11:36 AM
Thanks Octopus. This is my attempt at being spiritual in painting.
Just about done now. Had to cover it with retoutching varnish to get it a uniform gloss, to see what it looked like.Arnie