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napier
11-24-2012, 09:32 PM
I am working on this painting at the moment. It is oil on canvas 950x825mm. It was a combined raid by 489 NZ, 144 Canadian and 455 Australian squadrons. the question I want to ask is:

While at this stage could you all critique it and let me know what you think needs changing and worked on.

Looking forward to your comments.


http://imageshack.us/a/img846/2184/adsc0003w.jpg

Shamrock15
11-25-2012, 08:05 AM
I really like the start you have on this. I think your choice to angle the horizon paid off with this composition, you have a nice recession on the fjords in the back, and the shorelines really make sure you see the primary Beau. Possible issues - the freighter or warship in the foreground has a decidedly "aircraft carrier-like feel" to it. The buildings in the foreground are not on their verticals - you may have to tilt your canvas to get the vertical correct. And, from recollection, you will need to really disturb the water around the targets. The rockets and cannon fire really stir things up. Like I said, these points can be addressed depending upon your target audience. Some will care about them, some will not. I happen to think you have a really great start here, and am looking forward to its completion.

NeilF92
11-25-2012, 08:57 AM
Pretty good so far . The main aircraft looks like it will be good - although the front edge of the port engine cowling looks slightly egg shaped ? The port tailplane could do with a hint of depth - looks flat /thin at the moment.
I'm not cnvinced about the height of the mountains on the far side in comparison to the buildings .
I don't know the local geography so you may have it right - but Norwegian fjiords tended to have very high mountains in the pictures I've seen of that campaign.
Shamrock is right about the perspective lines of your buildings - the red roof line far left looks correct and I think you should draw the others close to that angle and not pointing down as they are.

shadwell
11-25-2012, 10:19 AM
great work so far i'm liking it !!

NeilF92
11-26-2012, 11:07 AM
Had an image google for Egersund - you look to have the hills about right - not very high at all as far as I can see .

napier
12-01-2012, 09:30 PM
just an up date where I am up to.

http://imageshack.us/a/img194/1281/dsc0016wa.jpg

NeilF92
12-02-2012, 08:07 AM
The aircraft look good - your perspective on the two nearest buildings is still way off though. On the nearest crimson one the lines are going straight into the sea. On the grey one next to it the gutter line and roof ridge diverge instead of being parallel or slight converge as they should.

Gray539
12-02-2012, 08:18 PM
I like the look of your main subject. I'm not sure about the position of the lead ship.

napier
12-08-2012, 05:07 PM
Have change things around a bit since I last posted. Deleted the small aircraft from behind the main one and placed two in front. Also played with the sky and sea a bit. Up to the dreaded lettering and props next.


http://imageshack.us/a/img713/4734/9124w.jpg

napier
12-14-2012, 08:22 PM
This is now finished P6-D aircraft was an outrider flown by W/C D Hammond DSO,DFC and his navigator was F/L R Parks DFC.

http://imageshack.us/a/img821/1338/dsc0031wx.jpg

and a couple of close ups

http://imageshack.us/a/img38/3908/dsc0035wtr.jpg

http://imageshack.us/a/img855/5034/dsc0036wku.jpg

Thanks for everyones advice

vegaskip
12-15-2012, 06:57 AM
Love the aircraft, well weathered Finnish, and the copper bronz exhaust ring is excellent. Not so keen on the back ground, I think the distant roof is too red, and a bit more work on the nearest ship would help.
Still, a excellent depiction of the Beaufighter.
Thanks for posting
Jim

faminz
12-18-2012, 04:08 AM
Agree.. The main beau is excellent!

Gray539
12-18-2012, 01:02 PM
Love the look of that Beau.