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jules34
09-04-2012, 03:35 PM
This is a commission that is in progress and has 3 more depending on how well this one turns out.Would love some C&C before it is done. Still working on fins and belly of fish. It is oil on canvas 11"X14".
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/04-Sep-2012/975939-thecatch2.JPG

jules34
09-04-2012, 03:40 PM
Close ups
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/04-Sep-2012/975939-fish1.JPG http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/04-Sep-2012/975939-fish2.JPG http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/04-Sep-2012/975939-fish3.JPG

Trumper
09-04-2012, 03:41 PM
:) Terrific,i look forward to seeing it's progress.

jules34
09-04-2012, 03:45 PM
Thanks Trumper

crafor
09-04-2012, 03:50 PM
I really like this painting. You have a really good start here.
I'm a newbie at this painting stuff, and have to do a lot of study and re-checking on my work, so take what follows with a grain of salt--I'm still learning.
People tell me my my darks aren't dark enough, and too often they are correct. I'd suggest checking the shadows. I know there's a lot of reflected light, but check the fish: belly, between the fins, under the mouth. Check the ribbon on the hat. I'm not good with elipses, but it seems to me the circle of the ribbon should be an elipse so it is pinned to the hat, not an afterthought.
The shadow of his head falls in a diagonal onto his shoulder and chest. Shouldn't that same shadow also fall from his nose, across his upper lip area?
The fingers of his left hand distract me. It's obvious you've put a ;ot of work into them, but I think the tips should close around the tail. The way you have it they lead out of the picture. I thought first they belonged to someone else.
But remember, I am learning myself, so...
It's beautifully done.
Ella

Wahsuzy
09-04-2012, 03:54 PM
I think this is simply fantastic!! Can't wait to see it finished! Great job:)

arnieb
09-04-2012, 03:59 PM
Looking good. Youve done well to get so much detail into 14x11 canvas. Lovely warm peacful, refreshing sceen. Couple of nit picks as itsa critt forum: horizon looks odd to me, left hand fingures - to0 big? Arnie

jules34
09-04-2012, 04:00 PM
Thanks for the insights Ella, and we are all still learning, it never ends. Here is the pic is is taken from, I lightened up his face in the painting so you could see his features better. He said not to worry about the emblem and wording on the hat (I also made the hat more of a ballcap because that is what he wears more often).http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/04-Sep-2012/975939-fisherman_001.jpg

jules34
09-04-2012, 04:43 PM
Thanks everyone, wow what great response. I am struggling with the left hand. As you cans ee in the pic, they go off the page and since the painting was larger width wise I was improvising and I also feel that they are off somehow

Grinner
09-04-2012, 07:06 PM
This is really wonderful. It's like I can feel the sun when I look at this! Love the color and the feeling of light.

My 2 cents: Is there any reason you can't just crop out that hand, and maybe even some of the tail end of the fish? I happen to think you would have a more interesting composition without that end of the image. Sure, it could be considered a bit of a cheat to avoid having to figure out the fingers, but humor me and cover that part of your painting with something to see if you don't actually like it better that way.

His right arm/hand (on the left side of the image) shows amazing detail, which looks fantastic. However, the face appears to have far less detail (not just because it is in shadow). Maybe that detail differential is intentional because you want the viewer to focus on the fish, but even with that in mind, I thought it worth mentioning.

Best wishes! I look forward to seeing the finished product.

Octopus Inc.
09-04-2012, 08:46 PM
this looks really great... I like the idea of possibly cropping the image on the right side to keep the viewer in the scene... the fishing pole at the angle it is should help bring the eye back up and to the center of the page if the crop is done correctly i do believe. I may also try darkening the face a touch and loosing the line between the hat and the right lens of his glasses. But there isnt a whole lot to pick at here. Things look accurate, the mood is nice and if that fish isnt bloody perfect i dont know what to say! I cant see any reason why you shouldnt get the other two commissions. Paint it up!

Debzy
09-04-2012, 11:46 PM
Jules I agree with the rest! It is a fabulous portrait and you have captured the mood and atmosphere perfectly!:thumbsup: I absolutely love fishing and the wholesome good feeling I get when I am fishing came to me immediately when I opened this post! :clap: I love it! There are some good (minor) crits here already and I have none to add, I can't wait to see more!!!
and if that fish isnt bloody perfect i dont know what to say!
My sentiments exactly Octo !!! Cheers :D Debs.

jules34
09-05-2012, 08:25 AM
You guys are great. Thanks for the suggestions. I really don't want to crop the hand because the client likes the way he is holding his fish (first thing he mentioned, as well as, making sure I put in the small amount of chest hair lol). I will post another pic again soon, I have reworked the fingers a little. It is hard, because he really does have larger hands and I am referencing my hands which are small. It is also a different perspective, as you can see from the photo, it was taken at an odd angle, which is also something he loved. Ahhh clients, it's difficult sometimes to do what they want and also use your own imagination.

Andrewcody
09-05-2012, 10:44 PM
Jules, amazingly good fish, hands, towel and the detail on the arm, hairs and everything, fabric on the shirt - if the client likes it ( and they should) don't crop anything.
I love the fish especially.
:)
Regards
Andrew

jules34
09-06-2012, 01:54 PM
Here is my final, about to show the client. Unless anyone has suggestions first. Thanks to all of you.
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/06-Sep-2012/975939-done3.JPG http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/06-Sep-2012/975939-done4.JPG

TDCT
09-06-2012, 03:36 PM
Brava! Love the fish, his...left hand haha (I always get confused about which I should call it when viewing...right of the painting, his left hand :S), the towel (superb), and the hairs on his arm. Everything else as well but those are the highlights for me!

jules34
09-06-2012, 04:08 PM
thanks TDCT.

song_bird
09-06-2012, 05:29 PM
You've done some really fine work here, and that fish is simply gorgeous!

What I notice, in terms of crits and likeness, is that the bridge of his nose and his nasal bone look wider and flatter in the portrait. There is so much in shadow in the photograph. Here it is lightened, showing the angle and shape of the nasal bone as it tapers towards the bridge, with some space between his glasses and his nose.

Hope that is helpful in finalizing your wonderful portrait! It looks like a proud moment for a fisherman!

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/06-Sep-2012/222563-fisherman.jpg

jules34
09-06-2012, 05:35 PM
Thanks song bird. With your side by side, I noticed his ear was too long as well