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Tresgatos
06-14-2012, 02:36 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/06-14-2012/113757_cropped_sized_etc_DSC_1325.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: "Garden Visitor" - Rainbow Lorikeet from Australia
Year Created:
Medium: Oil
Surface: Canvas
Dimension: 11 x 14
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
Hi,

I wanted to share a painting I just finished that I had re-done in WN water soluble oil paints from a watercolor painting I had done last year. Managed to change a lot about it and feel it is better than my watercolor. Was hoping for some constructive critique. It is on a canvas board size 11 x 14 inches.

This particular bird is a Rainbow Lorikeet and lives in New South Wales, Australia. It may live in other places but haven't gotten that far in my research. My Cousin had sent me a photo of this bird and said it was his regular garden visitor. He is getting married in July of this year and I wanted to send him this painting as a wedding gift but needed to see if it needed anything else before I send it off. I managed to misplace the original photo and had to refer to some photos I had downloaded from the web as well as my wc painting.

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Barbara

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Would very much appreciate Constructive Critique on this painting.

La_
06-14-2012, 05:16 PM
upper eye shadow seems cloudy, a bit bothersome
otherwise marvelous, well done

la

she1122
06-14-2012, 05:46 PM
I love the pose of the bird and the colors . Just two things I am wondering about . To me, the blues of the head look streaky . At first I thought that your paint was very thin. The blues of the leg do not strike me as streaky. Someone with more experience can perhaps help. I am thinking maybe the lighter blues should be a bit patchier instead of in streaks ? I understand about feathers, but to me, it is not working. I also wonder about the color of the background flowers. I love the flowers and consider them expertly done. But the color ? The bird is vibrant, thus a dulled pink seems not in coordination. I would wonder if white flowers or perhaps flowers of a color from the bird but not as vibrant would tie the picture together better ? I shall be interested to see what the pros have to say ! This picture is going to be so loved by the recipient !

dgford
06-15-2012, 09:01 AM
These colourful birds are so unreal, chattering away as they feed on the nectar of the flowers. We have a coconut ice grevillia right outside our breakfast window and they come to visit and feed just about daily.
My thoughts are that there is not sufficient light and shade of the blue of the head. It needs a lighter sheen on the top and a definitely deeper blue underneath --- and all with thinner strokes.
Geoff

Coen1
06-15-2012, 10:49 AM
The bird gets full attention, thanks to your use of colours: on the background soft, in the subject bold. Couldn't be much brighter. Adding some contrast in the lorikeet will work, I think. The space between wing and body, on the left, could be much darker.
A fine painting!

Tresgatos
06-15-2012, 01:31 PM
thank you all for taking the time to comment - appreciate it

lunchbox
06-16-2012, 04:05 PM
The eye seems to be floating in the black and may need some lid attention, but love the "Well, hi there!" attitude to this guy.

Tresgatos
06-16-2012, 08:31 PM
Thought you might like to see some photos of the Rainbow Lorikeet. Although I didn't use these because I downloaded them from the web, it gives you an idea of what they look like. In looking at the different birds I noticed the colors vary in each. Thanks for looking and commenting.

Barbarahttp://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/16-Jun-2012/113757-Lorikeet_Rainbow_Harris.jpghttp://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/16-Jun-2012/113757-Lorikeet_Rainbow_Perkins.jpg

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/16-Jun-2012/113757-Lorikeet_Rainbow_Cook.jpg



http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/16-Jun-2012/113757-Lorikeet_Rainbow_Hansch.jpghttp://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/16-Jun-2012/113757-Lorikeet_Rainbow_Luff.jpg

greensyster
06-16-2012, 09:17 PM
I think there is an issue with your lovely work. And it is that because the bird is so vivid it really needs some balance with darks in particular say under its beck
, under its wing, under its chest plus the claws (feet?) could be greyer maybe. Anyway, it is lookin' good!