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WithEyesLookingUp
06-03-2012, 08:54 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/06-03-2012/983217_010_2.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Gulls
Year Created:
Medium: Watercolor
Surface: Paper
Dimension: 7.25x4.75
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
I don't know if I should add more highlights to the seagulls or not, and if maybe I should crop out the gull on the far right.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
All comments welcome.

Avena Cash
06-03-2012, 09:41 PM
I think this is a good composition, relaxed and natural feeling and I would not cut or add figures at all. It is simple, as suits such a tiny image, and feels complete. I think the figures work very well and everything seems to belong.

I think there are problems only in the background. What struck me was the broken quality of white and blue in both water and sky. It seems to make the image busy all over so the eye has trouble resting/focusing. I think it's too much variation of value for the background.

I did a few edits showing my opinion. I evened out the value in the water and smoothed over white areas around figures, and also lightened the horizon line and sky. I think this helps the background look further away and the reduction of light and dark spots is gentler on the eyes and lets your foreground stand out.


http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/03-Jun-2012/1072682-comment2.jpg

Andrewcody
06-04-2012, 02:40 AM
I like it, would be a good study for an oil maybe

I do like the bird spacing with the far right Gull positioning, give some depth of vision.

WithEyesLookingUp
06-04-2012, 01:37 PM
Thank you both! =)
Avena Cash - I took your advice and softened the background.