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tgsloth
05-17-2012, 01:44 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/05-17-2012/124239_Leaving_the_Alley.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Leaving the alley
Year Created:
Medium: Oil
Surface: Canvas
Dimension: 18x24
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
The idea here is muted complementary colors in a violet/yellow scheme

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Open

La_
05-17-2012, 02:25 PM
what an interesting comp, bob!

the bike rider is excess to requirement imho
he kind of spoils the flow for me
why not let the stairs be the coi?

la

crazywoman53
05-17-2012, 05:42 PM
I like the rider.. to each his/her own right? The only question I have on this is the shadows. If that is shadow following the rider wouldn't there also be cast shadows from the railing? Like the composition lots!

eyecandy2
05-17-2012, 06:41 PM
Very interesting prespective here. Almost make me dizzy looking at it. Nice job Bob.

allanom
05-17-2012, 09:50 PM
Just take that reverse contrail behind the rider right out and you got a fab image!

dgford
05-17-2012, 10:40 PM
Great idea making good eye movement. The only thing that jars with me is the shape of the bicycle wheels --- no perspective indicated. I want ellipses!
Geoff

Andrewcody
05-18-2012, 03:27 AM
I agree with Crazy and Allanom the shadow from the back wheel to the right detracts
Keep the rider lose the shadow
Don't worry about the perspective it works anyway
Add some definition to whatever it is on the left

tony1
05-18-2012, 07:53 AM
Challenging view, really good job. If you keep the bicyclist I agree that the wheels need to be more elliptical and I'd lose the long shadow and only have a "grounding" shadow beneath the bicycle.

Regardless, a great job on a challenging perspective.

arnieb
05-18-2012, 12:17 PM
Great composition and viewpoint - really draws eye to the cyclist. Arnie

reverseengineering
05-18-2012, 02:01 PM
You really from Texas? This has got such a New Orleans feel. Love it!

tgsloth
05-22-2012, 10:43 AM
Thanks to the wonderful critiques, I did quite a lot of work on this one:
Allan and Andrew: the "contrail" was in the scene. Some sort of discoloration on the street. But I have a paint brush. Out with it!
Geoff: Good catch on the bicycle wheels. The funny thing is that in earlier layers, I drafted them elliptical but they rounded as I painted more. Dummy! Anyway, fixed now.
Andrew: Added definition to the walls.
La: sorry, cyclist stays
And added some shadowing under said cyclist.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/22-May-2012/124239-Leaving_the_Alley.jpg

crazywoman53
05-22-2012, 02:40 PM
Oh Yes! Perfection!!!! I like it I like it.. don't change anything else!

kotinka
05-22-2012, 03:35 PM
That is gorgeous! Well done! I love the way the staircase draws you into the rest of the picture. Removing the big shadow from behind the bike has worked very well.

Coen1
05-24-2012, 06:00 PM
Great composition. The one who looks at your painting is at the same time the one in the painting (though you didn't paint him/her), looking at the biker , if you know what I mean.

Coen1
05-24-2012, 06:00 PM
Great composition. The one who looks at your painting is at the same time the one in the painting (though you didn't paint him/her), looking at the biker , if you know what I mean.

AllanFink1960
05-24-2012, 06:18 PM
This is very cool. I cant paint like this.