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05-16-2003, 02:52 AM
Title: The Dancer
Year Created: 2003
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!
Three sessions with model who, even though she approved the pose, found it painful.
My intention was to use greys and browns except for the model.
Photo is grainy, done indoors...since we're due to get a big storm over next day it's the best I could get.
MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
what do you think about this? Does it evoke any feeling? Critique please.
05-16-2003, 07:09 AM
coloring, rendering, perspective .. all great .. not sure about the hook .. the head, leg, and box form a good triangle but once I get to the box I have alot of trouble getting back ..if some low longated item pointing to the head were on the box then you would have a better hook .. what do you think .. feels to me now that I am led down an alley with no option of turning back.
05-16-2003, 10:35 AM
a strong organic center unfolds purposefully and elegantly in a soft atmosperic universe, and she is definitely an accomplished dancer as well.
the space and surface supports
the marks suggest with accuracy
05-16-2003, 03:24 PM
I feel ... concentration, meditation, yoga ...
05-16-2003, 05:54 PM
You have a great way of making line and angle seem personal and right
I love the legs and her neck and all the striated muscles holding the pose
Very nicely done
and the light on her chest is wonderful
feeling? yes, from awe to quietude
05-16-2003, 07:47 PM
There's VERY LITTLE to really 'critique' here,..;..seems like more of a "congratulations" is in order...:)
One suggestion that I find appealing:
Cropping perhaps 3 inches from the top of the painting could very well make it much more powerful.
It seems as the top section is unnecesary and actually,....detracts from the overall. What do you think?.....:) NICE job-S
05-16-2003, 07:57 PM
Scott .. wonderful solution .. that keeps you in the room and within the triangle.
05-16-2003, 08:48 PM
A very strong subject, and an equally strong painting that echoes that strength.
05-17-2003, 05:47 PM
Well done! I would also suggest cropping off the top....everything else is perfect!
05-18-2003, 08:16 AM
I like this very very much, reminds me on Edgar Degas.
05-18-2003, 05:02 PM
Susan...This is wonderfully soft and quiet! I really like your palette in this one. Jim
05-19-2003, 03:02 PM
You are encrouching on Hopper's territory...GOOD FOR YOU!
I love your sensibility for your subject. The posture, the concentration. I can almost hear the music playing in the background.
I LOVE IT!
05-19-2003, 09:13 PM
(agree with the cropping idea)
love the lighting and fleshtones
05-20-2003, 02:06 AM
agree about the croping but I love the tones in that dress...also very nice pose
05-20-2003, 03:13 AM
Wayne, I actually added the box about halfway through...my intent was to keep you from leaving along the diagonal.
gilberte, that's more the model than ballet.
pam, the angles are what attracted to this viewpoint in the room.:D
scott, thank you. Been thinking about the crop idea...initially thought it was a good idea. After computer alteration not so sure. I think it changes the perspective bringing her up to eye level rather than the viewer standing and looking downward.
mark, in my computer crop I added more hair ...wondering if it weakens or strengthens?
pero, thank you.
Jan, degas synonomous with ballet;)
Jim, been watching yours.
Angel, wow! Glad you liked this.
giniaad, the model was fidgiting due to painful pose.
alan, the dress was done quickly and left alone.
Here's what it would look like cropped and with a bit of hair added:
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