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djstar
05-09-2001, 01:25 AM
I have had another try at the work for the husband's birthday gift.


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I did a progress piece
in the pastel forum (http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/Forum11/HTML/000361.html)

just keep plugging, and I can use the money!
dj*

David Acres
05-09-2001, 02:27 AM
Looking good DJ! http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif But why did she choose that view? And did she want that much covered too? Too shy you Americans! http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/wink.gif

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Unni
05-09-2001, 05:45 AM
Wonderful work DJ, nice color composition too. Overall, it's great work.

Unni

Dave Carter
05-09-2001, 07:43 AM
What a nice gift for your husbund. The red blanket is a good touch and I love the background. Otherwise I have to go with David that the pose is conservative. I'm wondering how you view your own back or is this his girl friend? (hehe!)

m_a_r_t_i_n
05-09-2001, 07:48 AM
Very nice, I would like to see more indication of legs http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/biggrin.gif

triplemash
05-09-2001, 09:58 AM
Awesome! I especially like the neck/shoulder area and the angle of her head. Very inviting. Her husband will love this! (I would if it were me!)

djstar
05-09-2001, 10:45 AM
Yeah, Martin, I know what you mean...
Her little tootsies show in the lower corner. I think what is missing is more indication of the weight of her rear end.
A little more heft in the butt will make the fact that her knees are pulled up make more sense.

Dave, this is the last...well I hope the last of a tale of a commission I am having trouble collecting on.
I have links here to how I did this one (http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/Forum11/HTML/000361.html)
and the original posted in the portrait forum (http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/Forum6/HTML/000146.html)
click the two links and see what the story is all about.
Dave, you dirty old aussie!
And thanks to the rest of you.
So far I think she likes it all but the blanket was too red.
dj*

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jnet11
05-09-2001, 11:31 AM
wow commissions are weird!

Perhaps a bit of orange in the red blanket to offset the blue background would work well ...

she does seem a bit cut off at the bottom, as though she fades away and has no weight there ... nitpicky thing though ...

good luck with this, the model seems a good one to use, if you didn't have to ok them by her http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/biggrin.gif

jeanette*

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cleo
05-09-2001, 04:25 PM
Originally posted by djstar:
I think what is missing is more indication of the weight of her rear end.
A little more heft in the butt will make the fact that her knees are pulled up make more sense.



The size of her b...(ego) is not hard to
discern. The size of the pain in the . . .
is also obvious.

Grin . . . thats her problem!

At this point, I'd do one of two things,
1. Close my eye and paint what ever it is
that she wants.

2. Tell her that . . . Oh well, your know
what I mean.

This piece is very sexy and that seems to
be what she wants. You did good!

commissions . . . some are easier than others.

cleo



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djstar
05-09-2001, 08:34 PM
I have scanned it and here is the final, truer colored piece:
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She is happy as a clam and all she wanted was for me to brown up the blanket (agree that it would be better orangy but what do artists know...)
Yuppers Cleo, she is the boss and she is bringing the cash manana.
Ps, the picture of her kitty cat from my camera scored mucho points!!
dj*

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David Acres
05-09-2001, 08:59 PM
Originally posted by djstar:
Ps, the picture of her kitty cat from my camera scored mucho points!!


So you did get a frontal! Let's see it! http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/wink.gif

I better go read those threads! http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif


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'The artist is no more than a receptacle for sensations, a brain, a recording apparatus. But if it interferes, if it dares, feeble apparatus that it is, to deliberately intervene in what it should be translating, its own pettiness gets into the picture. The work becomes inferior.... Paul Cezanne...

JeanineJ
05-09-2001, 09:24 PM
Beautiful! The second pic is very rich... I love the pillow! and how well you captured the action of the figure.

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bbbilly1326
05-10-2001, 12:05 AM
I have to say that the blanket strikes me as very odd. I can understand her not wanting complete nudity if she's modest, but how about a small cloth just to cover up her nude rear, but leaving the legs and back bare. Surely that would satisfy anyone's needs for modesty. Or pose in a backless dress that shows off her figure. It's almost as if she's BUNDLED up. Very odd. Maybe the blanket has some special significance, but then why not pose on it, rather than being wrapped in it?
Bill


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Suz
05-10-2001, 12:19 AM
I think its awesome. I like the pose, because it is not in your face nude, it is suggesting. She is sexy yet a little distant.
I can imagine she is very pleased. So you turned a bad thing around and made it work for you! Congrats, that was tough!!
I am sure you learned a lot (and so did we) and it will be easier next time.
Thanks for sharing.

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DonW
05-10-2001, 12:31 AM
The hair looks great, youve got that perfect bleached blonde look here with the yellow at the ends, almost wig like.

The shoulders and spine are very well done also. My eyes are immediately drawn to the right shoulder blade, which I find to be the most appealing part of this painting.

There doesnt seem to be a good sense of size here though. I know you mentioned that her knees are forward but there seems to be something out of proportion here. My thinking is that the top portion (shoulder area) is wonderfully three dimensional whereas the bottom portion is lost into being more flat. Granted this focus' the eye to the shoulder area but it seems to make the size of the overall figure kind of dwarfish.

Im not sure if this is finished or not but my suggestion would be to straighten out her right leg extending out towards the edge to give a more definite size to the figure and to portray a more natural pose.

Overall this is great and I love your pastel work.

I hope I dont sound too critical either. =)

Linda Ciallelo
05-10-2001, 09:56 AM
I think it's beautiful DJ. I do like it better since you warmed up the blanket color( or browned it a bit). I think that the red blanket was too red for the blue that is in the rest of the painting. I don't like red and blue together, unless there is no yellow.

ArtyHelen
05-10-2001, 11:01 AM
This is classic and beautiful.
Congrats DJ!
Helen

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Danny
06-05-2001, 06:06 PM
I Love It . I'm American. And One Thing Iv'e Never Been Accused Of Is Being Shy LOL.

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